The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I believe this statement is for the most part, correct. Although competition is necessary to a certain extent, the value of cooperation may outweigh it at times. Humans are naturally social creatures and we succeed the most when we work with each other, not against. By teaching our youth that cooperation is necessary, this will help individuals understand the importance of team work and healthy relationships.
True leaders know how to engage with their followers and make individuals feel valued in the work that they provide. For example, if we take a work place such as Apple Ltd. a leading tech company, one of the reason for their massive success and impressive customer brand loyalty that still remains today is due to the fact that the companys leader, Steve Jobs made sure to let the public know of their new product launches through seminars and campaigns. By enlightening his collegues and his customer base about his vision for Apple Technology, he was able to share his passion to his followers as well.
However, Just as much as humans are social creatures, I believe we are born with innate competitiveness as well. If all individuals entirely stopped being competitive this may prevent possible innovations that are yet to be seen. Our innate competitive drive has some perks as well. Most of the worlds existing innovations sprouted through competition in society.For example, Jeff Bezos, one of the most successful entrepreneuers of our time and founder of Amazon Ltd, would not have reached the same level of success if he did not have some competitive drive within him. His competitive drive to make Amazon one of the best online shopping sites could be conscidered a reason for the companys success.
In Conclusion, I personally believe that "too much of anything is not good" hence a reasonable level of both competition and cooperation should be instilled among young people in order to prepare them for any role of leadership.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, may, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1641.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 325.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04923076923 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85748265097 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572307692308 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.7275664241 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.214285714 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147642638254 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512502189401 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443098009077 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100035038481 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500167011714 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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