The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In today's modern world, with all the technological advancements, humans are competing against eachother to succeed in this race of life. The prompt suggests that inorder to instill a sense of leadership in younger generation, society should teach them cooperation instead of competition. However, I slightly diagree with this recommendation on basis of two reasons.
Since the day a child is born, he or she is automatically part of a race to get ahead of all the other children around him or her. From kindergarten to the college education, a child is compared against his or her peers. This comparison is not just done by the teachers or educational institutes but the parents also want their child to be on the top in every field. The child develops a sense of competition from a young age and in most of the cases it acts as a driving force or a motivation for the child to work hard. This has been the case for all the young people even before this digital shift in our lives. Throughout history, this system of competition produced revolutionary leaders in government and every other industry.
When a person enters the pofessional world, he or she has to overcome a number of obstacles, work hard and give his or her best because they have that sense of competition that drives them. They know in this fast paced world, if they want to be a leader in their field, they have to continue striving to be the best version of themselves because if they won't someone in their surroundings might beat them to it. Similarly, inorder to emerge as an effective leader, people need to beat theother candidates to be recognized. In a democratic country, opposing parties have to compete against eachother to gain the victory. This enables the parties to work in the benefit of the people to get most votes.
The other element to succeed is cooperation. Competition would definitely get people ahead in life but to truly make this world a better place, cooperation is needed. This is evident from the history that whenever humans were struck with some calamity or disaster, people came togethe and cooperated with ecahother to get out of it. In professional world, competition would allow a person to get to the position of leadership but to be an efficient leader, they would need to cooperate with opposition parties to effectively run the government and provide welfare to the general public. In the same way, competition would get people to the position of leadership but to stay there and be a role model, they would have to cooperate with the people around them and the poeople they lead.
In conclusion, while cooperation is definitely needed to prepare the young people for leadership, they need to have the sense of competition instilled in them as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 572, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...e government and provide welfare to the general public. In the same way, competition would get...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ound them and the poeople they lead. In conclusion, while cooperation is defini...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, similarly, so, still, well, while, as to, in conclusion, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 86.0 58.6224719101 147% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2299.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 475.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81073052678 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469473684211 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 726.3 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0314608844 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.95 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201673535591 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641045901867 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0624169694312 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133828120292 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678244345858 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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