"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Society is a place where people live in unity with integrity. The prompt suggests that solidarity is key to success rather than competition. I mostly agree, with the given statement for the following reasons.
Firstly, when people in society live by helping one another and promoting the growth of other then it is unlikely that the society will fail in fields like leadership and industry. For an instance, in a society, where people respect one another and provide manpower in achieving the important decisions that has been taken for the welfare of the society. Then their chances of failure will be very low. As they will exchange thoughts, expertise and decision making is fair represents all. On the other hand it is impossible to imagine a society to succeed when its member lack cooperation, respect for one another the society gets filled with rife and the young ones that are the future also gets blended in it from the very beginning.
Secondly, one who learns from the surrounding and is able to maintain the harmony is a true leader. For an instance, if a company wants to succeed than the best way would be to keep the experts working in harmony rather than creating a competition among them. If a specific department makes the mistakes then there should be discussion to improve rather than criticising the workers of the department. As, at times everybody makes mistake and they learn from it and they grow.
Lastly, some might argue that, competition is the important factor for preparing people in leadership role. For an instance, one can never imagine Steve Jobs or Bill gates working for one another, had they not had a healthy competition we would not have been able to use the modern devices. On contrary had they worked together they could have brought something new to the world, which only remains the possibility.
In conclusion, competition and cooperation both are important for the development of an individual. However, cooperation helps to learn and grow from the counter part whereas an unhealthy competition impediment the growth of an individual.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... one another and promoting the growth of other then it is unlikely that the socie...
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Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: OTHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'other than'?
Suggestion: other than
...ne another and promoting the growth of other then it is unlikely that the society will fa...
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Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...ther and promoting the growth of other then it is unlikely that the society will fa...
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Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...than creating a competition among them. If a specific department makes the mistake...
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Message: Did you mean ''?
...makes the mistakes then there should be discussion to improve rather than criticising the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1745.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68139428066 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541547277937 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2074647648 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.647058824 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209725219233 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621413309338 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529220276787 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104174994526 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321898966118 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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