The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

People in society somehow instinctively fall into a competitive environment despite how much they want to cooperate with each other. Cooperation is a way that binds humans to create a positive surrounding helping to grow each other, but without competition, they can not achieve more excessive development. The prompt suggests that to make leaders from the young generation in different fields like government and industry, is to instill cooperation rather than competition. In my opinion, both are needed in a healthy sense and my views are responded with three reasons.

To begin, cooperation helps people to be tolerated in difficult situations: if people are not considerate to each other, then there will be always chaos and conflict. For example, if any leader wants to assert a proposal to establish such as to impose a system in their corporation, but the other employees do not want it or there is a disagreement between the leaders and employee, then the corporation will not hold for a long time. The leaders and employees' uncooperative with each other can only create difficulties but not growth. So, it is needed to be considered in the point of disagreement in order to sort out the problems with groups.

Secondly, if the young leader only learns to be competitive in his whole life, then he will suffer at the time of leading. For example, the CEO of a company who had only been in competition in the classes without working together with his classmate, will not understand how to lead others. As a leader, he will race with his employees and will want to be better than others which will make him incompetent in the place of CEO. Because a company is only improved when all the employees and leaders work together efficiently.

But, competition is also needed to stimulate the eagerness to do better: people work better when they feel they need to win. For example, young people who do not feel competitive will lack to give their highest effort to acquire anything. They will not give the effort as all their work is done by grouping others. As a result, there will be lacking expertise and quality in them which makes them unqualified. So, competition is needed to make people serious to develop themselves.

In conclusion, the future leaders are those who cooperate with each other but are still competitive to stimulate the excitement and seriousness of the matters. But competition should be in a healthy way so that it only helps to improve himself, not demean others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2083.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9243498818 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83430931647 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472813238771 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.740742864 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.631578947 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2631578947 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224232382904 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070893367034 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494511128914 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13002661836 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047037236028 0.0667264976115 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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