At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages

Essay topics:

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

It is said that young people are the future of a nation. So, having more young adults than older can bring prosperity to the nations. But people should need to consider the weight of disadvantages over advantages. In my opinion, both benefits and losses are inevitable and can not outweigh each other. In this essay, I am going to explain my reasons with two points.

To begin with, if the spark of having large young people is looked at then individuals may think it is better to have them more rather than the older generation. For example, young adults can provide more energy and output to society. They can work longer, and be efficient and enthusiastic about any task. On the other hand, due to aging, older can not be active for longer hours. At a certain time, they can be a burden as they could not live by themselves - they need assistance such as need hand to walk, to care for their health. Therefore, younger is undoubtedly more beneficial than older in aspects of work efficiency and self-independency.

However, elders are always a blessing for other age groups as they can provide guidelines and wisdom from their life experiences. Without them, youngsters can succumb to purposelessness. For instance, if a country does not have any elders, then the children and adults will not have any directions. These ages are impulsive age to making them do reckless things. Also, it is hard to decide as they do not have much experience. As a result, there can be consequences not only can harm themselves but also to the nation. So, elders are unquestionably needed not only a portion but a balanced amount to watch out for the younger.

In conclusion, a large number of youngsters will not be the spark if there are not enough elders to show the path and wisdom. Though countries will have more output from young adults, this output can bring more harm than benefits without the direction from older people. So, the inequality in ages is not entirely worthwhile for any country.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... out for the younger. In conclusion, a large number of youngsters will not be the spark if the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 346.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77456647399 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6947941735 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517341040462 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1152968264 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6666666667 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4761904762 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158546390644 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474385609666 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412036713582 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107084940252 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044815138248 0.056905535591 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.0946893788 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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