The following appeared in a memo from the president of Bower Builders, a company that constructs new homes.
"A nationwide survey reveals that the two most-desired home features are a large family room and a large, well-appointed kitchen. A number of homes in our area built by our competitor Domus Construction have such features and have sold much faster and at significantly higher prices than the national average. To boost sales and profits, we should increase the size of the family rooms and kitchens in all the homes we build and should make state-of-the-art kitchens a standard feature. Moreover, our larger family rooms and kitchens can come at the expense of the dining room, since many of our recent buyers say they do not need a separate dining room for family meals."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The president of Bower Builder, a company that builds new houses, has written in a memo that they should expand the family rooms and kitchen as their competitor domus construction has these features and has able to sell houses at significantly higher prices than the national average. He has reached this solution based on a survey. however, the author’s contention, as it currently stands, rests on three unwarranted assumptions that currently render it invalid.
To begin with, the author has presumed that their company's competitor has sold homes much more quickly and at higher prices because their (domus construction) houses have a larger family room and a large appointed kitchen. however, this may not be the case: they could have better dealers and skilled employees to pursue the customer than any other company. The author did not mention how many of the selling houses have these house features and without proper records, his assertion does not hold water. it is possible that only a few of those houses have a big family room and kitchen, but the maximum number of houses do not. so, without proper data, any presumption could be inaccurate.
Secondly, the president has assumed that if they build bigger family rooms and kitchens in all houses, then they can boost their sales and gain higher profit. but they don't know if every customer wants that kind of feature. Maybe the maximum number of the buyers like a casual or small family room or average size kitchen and as a result, without getting any of these features, they could disagree to buy any houses which lead to more loss in profit. Even if all the buyers are agreed have these features, still there is no guarantee that the sales will increase. there is a chance that they (buyers) do not like other rooms or the location of the house. so, only having these two features could not ensure the higher profit and sells.
Thirdly, the author has asserted that as the recent buyers prefer to not have a separate room for dining, they can use the expense in kitchens and family rooms. but it is not certain how many customers will agree with not having a dining room. Therefore, there is a possibility that the expense may not cover the expenses. Also, a dining room does not need any extra features like cabinets and sink, and many more. so, two expenses cannot be equal and hence it may not be useful to eliminate the dining room for every house.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. if the writer can provide three pieces of evidence stated above and perhaps conduct a systematic research study, then it can be possible to determine whether their planning of extending the family room and kitchen in all of the houses will increase the profit and the sales.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 488 350
No. of Characters: 2278 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.7 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.668 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.312 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.499 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.406 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.705 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.109 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...eached this solution based on a survey. however, the author’s contention, as it current...
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Line 1, column 456, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'invalids'?
Suggestion: invalids
...ed assumptions that currently render it invalid. To begin with, the author has...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 222, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ily room and a large appointed kitchen. however, this may not be the case: they could h...
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Line 6, column 504, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...rds, his assertion does not hold water. it is possible that only a few of those ho...
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Line 6, column 628, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ut the maximum number of houses do not. so, without proper data, any presumption c...
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Line 8, column 160, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ost their sales and gain higher profit. but they dont know if every customer wants ...
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Line 8, column 169, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... sales and gain higher profit. but they dont know if every customer wants that kind ...
^^^^
Line 8, column 565, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...guarantee that the sales will increase. there is a chance that they buyers do not lik...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 654, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...her rooms or the location of the house. so, only having these two features could n...
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Line 10, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...e expense in kitchens and family rooms. but it is not certain how many customers wi...
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Line 10, column 416, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... like cabinets and sink, and many more. so, two expenses cannot be equal and hence...
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Line 10, column 526, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...minate the dining room for every house. In conclusion, the argument, as it stand...
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Line 12, column 127, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...nce on several unwarranted assumptions. if the writer can provide three pieces of ...
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Line 12, column 344, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...xtending the family room and kitchen in all of the houses will increase the profit and the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, third, thirdly, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 11.1786427146 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 487.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82546201232 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39072933969 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476386036961 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.8898620647 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.904761905 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1904761905 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04761904762 5.70786347227 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182118971701 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482210890873 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585787021936 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099940713325 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459079118821 0.0628817314937 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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