The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
I mostly agree with the claim that young people should be taught how to cooperate with each other especially if they are aspiring to become leaders in their dream jobs. Diverse fields ranging from research and technology, politics and sports, all require people to cooperate with each other in order to complete the work and achieve the goal in a timely and harmonious manner. However at the same time, even for just entering these fields, requires us to go through rigourous and tough competition.
I will further expand the above mentioned point with the help of below two examples.
Firstly, lets take an example from the field of research. One of the main aspects of research is to work together as a team. It is mostly carried out in groups, and in order to achieve results, it requires the efforts of all the people working together and being in sync with each other. A good communication becomes an important part of this job which is only possible when people are willing to cooperate with each other.
Secondly, politicians both within their party and across the parties when elected are required to work with each other in order to govern in an effective manner. This requires them to be jointly involved in decision making, policy making which requires them to spend a lot of time together with people having different ideologies and ideas. Clearly this is not possible without our politicians who can't cooperate with each other. Moreover, politicians are also required to work with other countries, where maintaing a diplomacy with both our friends and eniemies is an important part of the job which directly affects the country in a huge way.
In conclusion, though we are required to have a bit of competitive nature in order for us to get into our dream job, but in order to be good at what we do, requires us to have a sense of patience and willoingness to listen to each other, which is only possible if people are able
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
...goal in a timely and harmonious manner. However at the same time, even for just enterin...
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...work with each other in order to govern in an effective manner. This requires them to be jointly invol...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ot possible without our politicians who cant cooperate with each other. Moreover, po...
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... job which directly affects the country in a huge way. In conclusion, though we are requir...
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Suggestion:
...hich is only possible if people are able
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76627218935 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51168795442 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51775147929 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1788791934 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.923076923 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160777926756 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598050837805 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333634421923 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874245758401 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482158383787 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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