The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or otherwise fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In the memo written by the advertising director, the director recommends that Super Screen Movie Production Company should allocate a greater share of its budget next year in other to increase the number of viewers. To bolster this argument, the direction cites a recent report of their marketing department and the outcome of that report. Although, at the surface, the argument being put forward may seem cogent. A deeper dive reveals that those assumptions as it stands are unwarranted and the recommendation amounts to particularly poor advice.
Firstly, the methodology of the recent report employed by the marketing department may pose two serious problems. The report compared the number of people that attended the movies of Super Screen-produced with other years and failed to expatiate on the reason why the company recorded low attendance than previous years. It could have been that viewers now subscribed to online movie stores to watch movies produced including the ones by Super Screen. The author fails to substantiate with evidence that Super Screen-produced movies are not distributed by other means. Secondly, the report compiled reviews of specific Super Screen movies. This could have been some of the best movies that the company produced that were already doing well and not bad ones. In both case, this development significantly impacts the credibility of the report.
Furthermore, the manager fails to provide evidence on the quality of movies produced by the company. It may be that Super Screen has produced some movies with very good quality but it has also churn out a lot of very bad movies with poor reviews that the report failed to capture. The manager should substantiate clearly with evidences the overly quality of the movies the company has produced in recent time or the assumptions in this case is unwarranted.
Even if we assume that the quality of movie produced are quite good and that there are not creating the required awareness. This raises a question on whether advertisement before now are reaching the right audience. It is possible that recent movies produced are meant for the younger generation who can be captured via social media advertisement but the advertisement by the company still follows the conventional radio-television.
In addition, the advertising manager fails to expatiate on the allocation earmarked for advertisement in the previous years and how it was spent. Did the department used those allocated money for the purpose or it was diverted to other things. What is the expertise level of members of the advertisement team, are they majorly interns or seasoned advertises who understand trends. The manager should substantiate on these questions with evidence, failure of which may suggest that allocation of greater share of the budget may still not get to the right audience.
In sum, the manager should further scrutinize the recent report by the marketing department asking appropriate questions as discussed earlier. There should also be a review on the kind of audience that their movies is suppose to capture and review their advertising strategy. Furthermore, it should also access the quality of the advertisement team, failure to do this would amount to a particularly poor advice in increasing the budget which will not lead to the desired outcome.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 194, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'churned'.
Suggestion: churned
... with very good quality but it has also churn out a lot of very bad movies with poor ...
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Line 9, column 166, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'use'?
Suggestion: use
...nd how it was spent. Did the department used those allocated money for the purpose o...
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Line 9, column 328, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'intern'
Suggestion: intern
...he advertisement team, are they majorly interns or seasoned advertises who understand t...
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Line 11, column 219, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'supposed'.
Suggestion: supposed
...e kind of audience that their movies is suppose to capture and review their advertising...
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Line 11, column 386, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'particularly poor advice'.
Suggestion: particularly poor advice
...eam, failure to do this would amount to a particularly poor advice in increasing the budget which will not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, well, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 12.9106741573 217% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2812.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 535.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25607476636 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87960289767 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452336448598 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 877.5 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.481776994 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.166666667 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2916666667 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0382863730556 0.243740707755 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0120479346279 0.0831039109588 14% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0171237584079 0.0758088955206 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0234964611187 0.150359130593 16% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01929417997 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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