"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The concept of leadership in our society today is subject to various reasoning or idea of how things should be done. So it’s not surprising for people to hold different views. The prompt suggests that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government and other fields is by promoting cooperation and not competition. I strongly agree with this and argue that societies encourage cooperation in leadership roles amongst its youth for three reasons.
Starting with leadership in government, I believe the best way of ensuring good governance or great leadership performance by youths in the government is for them to work together. After all, a tree doesn’t make a forest, and a government doesn’t consist of only one man or only one department. When leaders in government work together, they are only bound to achieve great results. For example, when Barack Obama was president of the United States, he worked closely with the president of Pakistan to successfully kill notorious terrorist, Osama Bin Laden, who was at the time hiding in Pakistan. Not to say competition is bad, but it’s simply not suitable in most occasions when it comes to governance. If there had not been cooperation between the leadership of both countries, and they instead were competing for “who gets Bin Laden first”, the mission may have failed. Surely, both governments must have understood the importance of cooperation right from their early days as a young politician.
Moving on, promoting cooperation between industry leaders is sure to yield fruitful results. Competition in the industry, sure is good, as it keeps all parties involved alert and at their best. However, this mostly results in unhealthy rivalry and a clash of egos. On the other hand, if industry leaders in a particular field decide to cooperate and work together, they do so for the betterment of the society and not the enrichment of their pockets. For example, consider the aviation industry. We have seen how a company manufactures an airplane (Airbus), and another company produces the jet engine of the airplane (Rolls Royce). This collaboration between both companies has been going on for several decades and keeps advancing to ensure construction of safer airplanes. What do we have to thank for this? Cooperation!
Lastly, in other fields such as medicine, cooperating and exchanging ideas or discoveries has led to the advancement of the sector. This, in turn, improves the quality of life of the people of the society. For example, leaders in the health sector coming together to exchange scientific discoveries to develop COVID vaccine. Competing on “who comes up with a cure first”, while it may add fortunes to one company, it will only have delayed the development of the vaccine, and thousands of more people would have died. Hence, cooperation is better instilled in youth leaders than competition.
In conclusion, the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, and other fields is to promote cooperation and not competition for the above reasons. This way, everyone enjoys the benefits and the society moves forward.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, so, still, while, after all, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2676.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 519.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15606936416 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85937345804 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516377649326 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.5828307037 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.923076923 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9615384615 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33021662218 0.243740707755 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932027958154 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108697467496 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222510420376 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118352832544 0.0667264976115 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.