The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The claim made by the author states that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. It's a well known fact that the youth of today will be the leaders of tomorrow who will set an example for generations to come and guide them to glory. It's thereby important that these budding leaders grow up with the right moral values and have a sense of unity and cooperation instead of competition. Thereby, I agree with the author's claim.

Unhealthy competition between leaders never ends well and should be discouraged from a young age itself. A perfect example for this is world wars. World War 1 and World War 2 are two of the most tragic events in history and both of them stemmed from the competition between leading nations. It was a race for arms, a competition for the title of most powerful nation. The result was the destruction of many lives and properties, effects of which are seen till date. However, if our past leaders were cooperative and had put their resources together then the world would have been a much better place today. The same applies to not only nations but also industries or any other field. This proves that youth must be taught to cooperate instead of compete so that they can grow up to effective leaders.

A sense of cooperation brings people together in unity. It's important for people to feel connected and in sync with their leader, and work towards a common goal instead of competing for unnecessary things like money, power, fame etc. This mindset should be developed from a young age. By cooperating, leaders can pull in resources and achieve so much more than what they can alone. For instance, two managers of a company that are fighting for the same project. Instead of competing, it would benefit them to share resources and complete the project together. It's a win-win situation for all. This can be applied to leader's of all fields. This shows that a cooperative nature is a must for the leaders of tomorrow.

That being said, people may argue that competition is necessary for people to grow. There needs to be comparision between two people. Granted, there needs to be a motivation to work hard to win, but I disagree that competition is required. Cooperation alone can be enough to encourage leaders to work hard and do well.
In conclusion I would like to support the author's statement and justify that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... sense of cooperation, not competition. Its a well known fact that the youth of tod...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...rces and complete the project together. Its a win-win situation for all. This can b...
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Line 8, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... conclusion I would like to support the authors statement and justify that the best way...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74730021598 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64694909963 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481641468683 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.992890722 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5384615385 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8076923077 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.03846153846 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335099803046 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.091196212384 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107552786811 0.0758088955206 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226832933092 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.121828970349 0.0667264976115 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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