The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In recent time, the best way a society can prepare its young people for leadership position is a debate. Some believes that it should be by imbibing in them a sense of cooperation while some believes that it should be by creating an avenue for competition. The prompt presented addresses this issue. I mostly agree that the best way young people can be prepared for leadership leadership position in all ramification - in government, industry or other fields is by imbibing a sense of cooperation in them with the following three reasons. However, I concedes that creating sense of competition create more sense of responsibility in the mind of young people.
Firstly, instilling sense cooperation in the young people will enable them work with different people which will make them to be more productive. For example, as a manager of the production unit of an industry, working together with his labourer will yield more production in that unit. Another example is a governor who works in cooperation with the his cabinet, will not need to do all things that is needed to be done but there will be delegation of task whichis a true definition of true leadership.
Morever, doing things out of competition is not a true measure of achievement. For example, a president of an association comparing his achivements with another leader of different organization with little or no achivements will claim to have achieve something tangle whereby, if compared to another one, will realized he has only achieved little. Also, for an instance, a husband, who is the head of the family has to cooperate with his wife in other to make tangible achievements.
Meanwhile, some will argue instilling the sense of competition in young people create more sense of responsibility which make them be a good leader due to the fact that they will want to be the best, this may be true.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 367, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: leadership
...st way young people can be prepared for leadership leadership position in all ramification - in gover...
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Line 1, column 551, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'concede'
Suggestion: concede
...the following three reasons. However, I concedes that creating sense of competition crea...
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Line 3, column 348, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'his'?
Suggestion: the; his
... governor who works in cooperation with the his cabinet, will not need to do all things...
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Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'achieved'.
Suggestion: achieved
...le or no achivements will claim to have achieve something tangle whereby, if compared t...
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Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'realize'
Suggestion: realize
...ereby, if compared to another one, will realized he has only achieved little. Also, for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, still, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 316.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9335443038 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90840444022 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48417721519 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9324435257 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.916666667 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376726645287 0.243740707755 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149689314834 0.0831039109588 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.14248602347 0.0758088955206 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22439925685 0.150359130593 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15556983358 0.0667264976115 233% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.