A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In recent time, there has been a debate on the curriculum a students in a nation is required to study. Should student study unified national curriculum or different curriculum until they enter college? Many would argue that a unified curriculum should be studied by all students of a nation while some would argue that schools can design their unique curriculum for their student. I mostly agree to the promt, that all student, should study similar or general curriculum until they enter college based on two reasons.
Firstly, studying same national curriculum would give the government the avenue to be able to evaluate the academic standard of the schools in a nation without being biased. Since every schools used thesame curriculum, schools not meeting up with the standard would be able to be traced easily. Consider the instance where an a unified examination is administered by the government, the performances of student could be evaluated and to a large extent, can be used to judge the academic standard of the schools.
Another advantage of using same national curriculum for students is that it helps to restrict schools, especially, owned privately, to adopt irrelevant schemes which might not be benefiary to their students. For instance, if the government has specified in its approved curriculum that all science students should pass at least one social science subject before any promotion to next class, this will hinder any private schools to compromise on this requirement. Another example , Uniformity in the academic sector is resulted from using a national curriclum in all schools. Things to be taught
It would not be fair to neglet the fact that having unique curriculum for each school might advantageous, as it gives each school to come up with what they think might help their student not only in improving academically, but in building them in other areas of life like sport, culture, morals etc, however, it should be monitored and scrutinized thorougly by the government so as to ensure it meet up with the standard required.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...ere has been a debate on the curriculum a students in a nation is required to study. Shoul...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lum until they enter college? Many would argue that a unified curriculum should b...
^^
Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: an; a
...ced easily. Consider the instance where an a unified examination is administered by ...
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Line 3, column 478, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ise on this requirement. Another example , Uniformity in the academic sector is r...
^^
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...se on this requirement. Another example , Uniformity in the academic sector is re...
^^
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...clum in all schools. Things to be taught It would not be fair to neglet the fact ...
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Line 4, column 377, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...scrutinized thorougly by the government so as to ensure it meet up with the standard req...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 396, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'meets'?
Suggestion: meets
...ly by the government so as to ensure it meet up with the standard required.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, while, as to, at least, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12166172107 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73249158759 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53412462908 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.2672895676 60.3974514979 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.909090909 118.986275619 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6363636364 23.4991977007 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284698911225 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141583944687 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919150845927 0.0758088955206 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174345355115 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107748502149 0.0667264976115 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
...ere has been a debate on the curriculum a students in a nation is required to study. Shoul...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 213, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lum until they enter college? Many would argue that a unified curriculum should b...
^^
Line 2, column 323, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'an' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: an; a
...ced easily. Consider the instance where an a unified examination is administered by ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 478, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ise on this requirement. Another example , Uniformity in the academic sector is r...
^^
Line 3, column 479, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...se on this requirement. Another example , Uniformity in the academic sector is re...
^^
Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...clum in all schools. Things to be taught It would not be fair to neglet the fact ...
^^^
Line 4, column 377, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...scrutinized thorougly by the government so as to ensure it meet up with the standard req...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 396, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'meets'?
Suggestion: meets
...ly by the government so as to ensure it meet up with the standard required.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, so, while, as to, at least, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12166172107 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73249158759 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53412462908 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.2672895676 60.3974514979 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.909090909 118.986275619 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6363636364 23.4991977007 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284698911225 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141583944687 0.0831039109588 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0919150845927 0.0758088955206 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174345355115 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107748502149 0.0667264976115 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.