It has been argued that the most effective way of preparing young people for various fields is by teaching them to be co-operative, not competitive. With some qualifications, I agree with this view and will attempt to elaborate on my reasoning in this essay.
First, it is clear that co-operation allows people to achieve that which cannot be otherwise achieved. Indeed, when we co-operate with each other, we are essentially sharing our experiences and knowledge on a particular matter to solve a particular issue. This allows us to more effeciently tackle the issue at hand and through different angles. On the other hand, when we are working on a matter all by ourselves or along with likeminded individuals, which often is the case whe are competing, we are devoid of the knowledge of our colleagues/competitors; accordingly we are less likely to achieve much; nor do we learn from our mistakes given our lack of interaction with others from our field.
Second, co-operation can allow us to make more societal contributions as we pursue our tasks. Here the topic of climate change and its relation to industrial organizations is quite revealing. Had industrial organzations co-operated more with each other, they would have been able to cut down on greenhouse emissions that are damaging the world at large. Yet, because they have decided to adopt a competive mindset, the animosity between them remains, preventing them from coming together to pursue the common good for society; such would not occur had they been instilled with the urge to co-operate.
On a final note, I should admit that competion incites us to push ourselves to a level that co-operation does not. Indeed, in competitive environmentd, such as in schools and businesses, we are compelled to address our weaknesses and at the same time think innovatively. Indeed, many innovations, such as the Iphone, have come out via competion between firms rather than co-operation, just as so many students have improved themselves by competing with their peers.
Overall, however, I still believe that co-operation, not competion, should be encouraged amongst youngsters, since it allows them to more effectively tackle problems and also aim for societal well being. It is only when such results do not follow from co-operating should we adopt a competitive mindset in order to push ourselves to the limits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, well, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17616580311 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1106514398 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569948186528 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6105185768 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.2 118.986275619 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7333333333 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0915294973695 0.243740707755 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340770170388 0.0831039109588 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478802060007 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0582814940853 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.045601568661 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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