"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The famous baseball player Yogi Berra once said that "In theory, there is no difference between theory and practice, but in practice there is ". Similarly, the idea of preaching co-operation as the best way to prepare the young generation for leadership roles across a spectrum of roles in Government, industry and so on, is at best idealistic which would look good in theory, but in reality, would serve to limit in exploiting the full potential of the young leaders of tomorrow.
If we look at the governments and industries of today, they are all characterized by cut-throat competition. There could be several senators from a political party, but only a few would be considered worthy to run for the President's office. This sort of odds of reaching the top is self-explanatory when it comes to why competitiveness is important. Similarly, in industry, there is competition across markets, products, human resources and so on. This is a day and age where companies acquire other companies for profit. In a world, where competition is as stiff as this, a lax attitude could cost the young generation dearly.
By asking the young people to cooperate, they are losing their competitive edge. They will end up being just one in the crowd and would be averse to fierce competition and leadership roles which are highly demanding. It may be exaggerating a bit, but, someone who is so used to being co-operative and not used to speaking his own words may turn a blind eye to any evil in his field of work. He is so used to and happy with being one of the crowd, he might never raise a voice of dissent. This is definitely not a trait of a leader in the making.
Most of the leadership programs these days focus on team building activities and leadership training. Even in job interviews, group activities play a paramount role in selecting its future employees. But, what is a common characteristic in all of these is what they look for in the candidate. Is it how well they cooperate with the team? This could be true. But one will stand out from the others by the initiatives he takes in the activity and how successful he is in making the group agree with his line of thought. All leadership training programs must be conceived and implemented this way to ensure success for its participants.
It is often said that leaders are born and not created. But what sets them apart from a follower? These are their unique personality traits and a desire to achieve greatness. And greatness comes from the desire to be the best. By asking these born leaders to co-operate and not show their full potential, we are asking them to be like blunt knives. Thus the leader in them ends up being buried six feet under even before being born.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vernment, industry and so on, is at best idealistic which would look good in theo...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...re asking them to be like blunt knives. Thus the leader in them ends up being buried...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, similarly, so, thus, well, apart from, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.725 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79745668222 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5125 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.3336893037 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2307692308 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.53846153846 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156784973181 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361894608595 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388687910495 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0879408761475 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555080645926 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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