The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.’
Competition vs cooperation is a debate that has been running since the beginning of civilization. Do people perform better when they are challenged by their peers or do they strive when they are provided a benign environment where everybody has equal opportunities? While both models have their pros and cons, history provides evidence that a sense of competition among students always brings out the better in them.
Firstly, Humans are ego driven beings. The desire to prove oneself to be better than others is what drives us as individuals. If channeled and utilized properly, this desire can become a very strong motivation. Students who are competitive in nature often bring out the best in each other. These students will someday be required to represent world class organizations. Large tech organizations like Apple and Samsung, for example, are constantly competing with each other for the number 1 spot in terms of mobile device sales. Instilling a spirit of competition among students from a very young age will help prepare them for the challenges they will face later on in life, once they have been hired by a firm that wants to be number one in its field.
Secondly, an environment where there is no competition often leads to complacence. That is not what our objective should be as the most intelligent beings on the planet. Humans, as a race should always strive to become better at what we do. Be it astronomy, sports, arts or government administration, the goal has always been to improve. A world of cooperation might prove to be encumber that. A relevant example that comes to mind to justify this claim is the reservation system in India’s public sector where 30% of the seats in government institutions and offices are reserved for backward classes of society. While this has greatly helped said backward classes to regain their position in society, many members holding seats through quota make no efforts to improve their skill set since they have no competition to face. This brings in mind the third and last argument in favor of competition.
Competition ensures that only the most skilled make it to the top. This warrants that people have to make genuine efforts to attain positions of authority. Take Carnegie Mellon or any other pioneering educational institute for example. There is only one way one can get an admit to the university – by beating the competition. No wonder, CMU alumni are revered throughout the world as they are known to have proven themselves in their respective fields.
Competition thus ensures that each candidate puts his best leg forward. This not only benefits organization that hire these people but also the world in general as they are provided a better standard of service by leaders who do not understand settling down and strive to better themselves at each step of their careers. It also ensures that only the best people get in, and thus elevates the level of effort that people are required to put in order to be recognized.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind justifying'.
Suggestion: mind justifying
... that. A relevant example that comes to mind to justify this claim is the reservation system in...
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Line 7, column 271, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...mple. There is only one way one can get an admit to the university – by beating the comp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, third, thus, while, for example, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2511.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 505.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97227722772 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7409517308 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526732673267 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 795.6 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.103663651 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5769230769 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4230769231 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96153846154 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156320422548 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361287458872 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460165211752 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0832082796169 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518427804521 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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