The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It seems that society keeps shifting between cooperation and competition regarding which ability is more important for young people preparing for roles of leadership. Those who support competition say that competition is the true driving force for a person to work harder. On the other hand, other people claim that today's leaders need to learn to cooperate with others because problems, both world issues and technological, have become much more complex. I believe with the latter, in that educating a sense of cooperation is the best way to prepare young adults for leadership in goverment, industry, and other fields.
Admittedly, an optimal degree of competition is a good stimulant for people to realize their full potential. It drives people to go above the limits of their abilities in order to prove that they are as worthy as anybody else. For example, in university entrance exams, students are ranked according their scores. Therefore, students who want to be accepted to prestigious universities are instilled with the idea that they have to receive a higher score than others, enforcing them to study much harder. The amount of grit they attain through years of hard work train them to work harder at other things as well, likely leading them to earn leadership positions in their future careers. It is not likely for a student who was lazy in school to suddenly change his or her attitude and become an assiduous member of society as an adult.
However, even though the concept of competition may have a positive effect in developing future leaders, today's problems require leaders to be more cooperative with others. World issues such as global warming, Syrian refugees, and space exploration cannot be solved by one nation. Major global issues require communication between countries and support for one another. For example, in the case of attenuating global warming, experts from all around the world gather together to hold conferences about how to tackles this problem. Through theses meetings, countries agree that each of them should lower their emission of greenhouse gases. If one particular leader of a nation was only fixated on the interests of its own country, it would defy the agreement and argue that it needs to run its factories, a significant cause of global warming, to develop its industries. This would be showing a very poor leadership, because it would be alienating all of the other countries who might later be of help to that country. Therefore, as today's problems require the cooperation of world leaders, young adults should be trained to develop their cooperative skills.
Also, technological improvements have caused professionals of different areas to work together. For example, the IoT technology not only requires the knowledge of how the IoT technology itself works, but in order to connect it to other devices, people need to be knowledgeable about mobile phones, TVs, air conditioners, and other electronic devices. It has become common for pepole from different departments and companies to work together, because these associations have produced synergy effects. Also, in the case of smart phones, it is not only important for companies to develop the specifications of their items. The design of the product as well as how it is marketed has become important as well. So divisions gather together to discuss these matters even before the item is made.
In conclusion, even though nurturing competitiveness in young students might seem an effective method to develop leaders, I believe that cooperativeness is a more important trait in today's world. World issues need leaders of all nations to amicably communicate with each other, and technological developments have made it necessary for people from different fields to come together and make improvements from the current status.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 95.0 58.6224719101 162% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3232.0 2235.4752809 145% => OK
No of words: 618.0 442.535393258 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22977346278 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98594081286 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84619506401 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 306.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495145631068 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1013.4 704.065955056 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9111603903 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.307692308 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42307692308 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208967929604 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582096177521 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06374207938 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12341793626 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783837702983 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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