The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Can instilling the sense of cooperation and not competition prepare the young generation for leadership in government, industry or other fields? I agree with the speaker that coordination and cooperation between the collegues and teammates is definitely required to augment the government, industry and other fields. But, on the other hand, I feel that a competitive environment is required to increase the efficacy of the people in that field.
The society must prepare its young, tyro people for leadership by imbibing various team qualities like cooperation, team coordination, etc. This young generation is the future of mankind who will control the government and industry. Moreover, they are filled with great enthusiasm and are energetic in nature. If their is no cooperation between them, that energy can be enervated. Their fervid nature can transform the government. True leaders have always been successful through sense of cooperation.
On the other hand, competitive environment in highly necessary in the government, industry and other fields. Human has always been competitve in nature. Furthermore, competitive environment has always bolstered his/her true qualites like leadership which have proved to gain success. If there is competition between the leaders of different industries, there can be tremendous growth. For example, due to competition between tech giants like Amazon and Google, a cloud computing environment called Kubernates was born. This burgeon was due to competition between the leaders and not due to cooperation.
Admittedly, if there is no competiton, the government and the industry might tend to be sluggish. Since there is no competitive environment, no innovative ideas might influence the leaders. Leaders of that field might become languid and lethargic and it can affect the field to greater extent. Various powerful industries, government of the countries have been overpowered and taken over or have become moribund due to lassitude.
In sum, society must prepare its young, fledgling people for leadership in all fields by instilling both sense of cooperation as well as the sense of competition. I agree to the speaker's claim but also would like to add the value of the competition which should be imbibed by the young people too. Finally, the speaker only claims between two qualites. But for leadership, many other qualities like sharpness, potent to take risks, etc must also be taken into consideration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 314, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...husiasm and are energetic in nature. If their is no cooperation between them, that en...
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Line 9, column 127, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...by instilling both sense of cooperation as well as the sense of competition. I agree to th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, for example, i feel, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48556430446 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01615803723 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482939632546 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8801892088 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.8695652174 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5652173913 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27107325208 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739107289896 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896954544715 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159373978664 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0894394920419 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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