Indeed for any society to flourish cooperation among its members for the bedrock, the solid foundation on which society should be built. However, to argue that young people can be prepared for leadership across government, industry or any other field by instilling in them a sense of cooperation is little far fetched. I will be presenting couple of arguments reflecting why cooperation is not the best idea to develop leadership in young people.
The very basis of why some of early industrialized countries are now developed countries because they took leadership in industrial revolution and through competition only the technology improved to a vast extent so that production of goods became resource optimal. Had there been no cut throat competition among industrialists of 18th century we would have been this developed. Consider for a fact that Ford revolutionized the car manufacturing, Manchester became hub of cloth production and so on. This all happened because leaders were competing against each other to achieve the best. Hence, we must instill feeling of competition among young ones to make them aware to stay on their toes and strive for the best.
Also, from my experience, I can very well say cooperation is a mechanism used by people of developing and underdeveloped countries. This they do reduce collective costs as well as enhance their gains. As well as many social problems can be solved by means of collective action and cooperation only. In those scenario's the extent of leadership is limited, rather leadership is spread across the community and people. As the community develops and progresses, there is less and less need for cooperation among the members of that community or in larger context the country. Hence it can be argued that although cooperation is a handy quality yet it will certainly not make the world a better place if practiced by all the leaders.
I would like to argue that competitive leaders are most cooperative ones, because when a leader is competitive or aggressive, whole institution walks the path of obtaining best outcomes. This is other leaders also get into action to strive for better than what is present now, fueling further innovations and development. Hence, society must try to instill being competitive in young people more than being cooperative.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Indeed,
Indeed for any society to flourish cooperation...
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Suggestion: obtaining the best
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, so, still, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16976127321 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95717783692 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554376657825 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2517960459 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.647058824 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11764705882 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270150424836 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835858205968 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985695298075 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175701869172 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127344336388 0.0667264976115 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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