the best way a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or any other fields is by instilling in them the sense of cooperation, not competition.

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the best way a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or any other fields is by instilling in them the sense of cooperation, not competition.

Instilling in sense of cooperation in the prosterity to prepare them take lead
in government, industry and other fields has it's merit's; however, i wouldn't say it as the best bet to groom them for the role .

When we are talking about preparing the young to take up cardinal roles in the society, we should start preparing them for the real world they would actually be operating in. In the fast paced, competitive world, the young needs to be shrewd, objective, critical and most importantly independent while making tough decisions for better or for worse. for things as trite as playing an online game, till the time you are playing against the computer, you are comfortable and well aware of the environmen, the moment you play against another human that's where things go haywire. It brings out the best in you.

In all fairness, it doesn't mean that cooperation and collaboration plays a huge rule in shaping an individual, it creates a congenial environment where everyone is lendind their hand to climb the ladder ; empowering each other as we along the way.having said that, staying for too long inside this postive bubble makes us complacent and overly dependable on others depriving us from us from the making salubrious decisions on our own.

Keeping a competive face, keeps us on our toes with adreneline rushing through the veins, ready to stive towards arduous goals with a distinct thought seperating one from the rest of the herd.

In generality, while talking about preparing the young for the future we cannot just insitill in them half thought ideologies; a healthy competition amongst individuals is the stepping towards innovative thinking while not subverting the sense of cooperation in them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, however, so, still, well, while, in general, talking about

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 285.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05614035088 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7264980908 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642105263158 0.4932671777 130% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.421104979 60.3974514979 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.125 118.986275619 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.625 23.4991977007 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.21951772744 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232236389174 0.243740707755 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103050232984 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101131920058 0.0758088955206 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130363946194 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.08653901785 0.0667264976115 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 14.1392134831 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.8420337079 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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