Social structures rely on the principles of cooperation and competition. Humanity can prosper due to the cooperation between different individuals leading to results unattainable without working together and due to competition leading to the best possible outputs. Today, people wonder whether future leaders should be taught to be more cooperative or more competitive. A competitive mindset has its advantages but is not as good as a cooperative one as outlined in the following discussion.
Some people argue, that we should educate our children to be competitive rather than to be cooperative, because competition is the foundation of liberalism and has led our society through the industrial revolution which put humanity forward. However, this magnificent result would not have been possible if people had not cooperated. Industrialisation is the result of specialisation, meaning that people no longer produced goods on their own like peasants have done before the revolution. On the contrary, many of them worked together to produce a single good, where each individual was specialized to conduct a specific step in the production process. This example shows that cooperation is the foundation of our modern economy. Furthermore, it is not only important on the micro-scale discussed before, but also on the macro-scale; cooperation between companies has led to specialisation as well. Therefore, the leaders of tomorrow should be taught to be cooperative.
Another argument that people bring forward when arguing for teaching young people the importance of competition is, that this often brings about the best results in us as can be seen in sports competitions which lead to ever greater world records. However, these achievements are only possible due to teamwork. A race car driver for example may win each of his races and obtain new lap records, but this would never be possible without his team, which helps him to prepare physically and mentally for the races and cares for his car. This illustrates the importance of cooperation once more and is one of the reasons why cooperation should be valued higher than competition as it is its foundation.
All in all, the question whether we should value competition or cooperation as a value for future leaders higher is a complex one. Competition has shown to be necessary to reach the best results as can be seen in sports and industry. On the other hand, one who wants to compete needs to cooperate in order to be successful! This implies that cooperation is more fundamental than competition, which is why future leaders should be taught to have a cooperative mindset.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: WHETHER[5]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "the question"?
Suggestion: whether
...s it is its foundation. All in all, the question whether we should value competition or cooperat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25059101655 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09884083557 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508274231678 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.815649383 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.388888889 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112965440622 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0345833526102 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.032516719011 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.075682837042 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036370608228 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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