"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

There is no perfect way to get an individual prepared for leadership. Every field is different, but at the end of the day if a society wants a better future it must instill values that are transferable by all sorts of people, in any field they find themselves in. For this reason, this is a very reasonable claim and the following paragraphs will not only substantiate it, but also exemplify possible counterarguments.
First, a sense of cooperation will last young people far longer in any industry than competition ever will. It is believed, however, that competition is a necessary driving force, especially in an ever-growing capitalist society. If a young graduate walked down Wall Street saying that competition isn't worthwhile, they might as well be wearing a dunce cap. However, it would also be foolish to say cooperation has no place, as there as thousands of transcations and investments going on which require cooperation on both the side of the buyer and seller. The point that cooperation will last longer does not negate the need for competition, but emphasizes that even competitive environments require a cooperative nature.
Furthermore, industries are truly looking for the younger workforce to come in with soft skills that focus on cooperation as opposed to competition. One could argue that this sense of cooperation can cloud one's judgements. This was said about the famous Elon Musk not too long ago, when he revealed he would be making the patent on his Tesla cars public, allowing for competitors to copy his exact designs. Though it may look like a foolish decision for some, economists agreed that this open-mindedness will lead to future innovators to continue to pave the way for green technology and give to the greater good. If Musk had led with a sense of competition, promotion of envionmentally concious cars would have been dismal. In short, a sense of cooperation can lead to more innovation, as opposed to the stifling greediness that often comes out of competition.
Finally, many fields have been adopting methods to see how to grow and retain their workforce and it has often come down to the motivations that employees come in with. More specifically, the field of Industrial/Organizational Psychology has been increasing due to companies realizing there is something more than just focusing on its profits and losses. Challengers to this fact may say that industries have done just fine without 'interventions' in the workplace. Although there may be some truth to this, it does not negate that such a field is growing in prominence because industries want to do even better than they were before. Much competition has been found among co-workers (for example, who sells the most of a product) which can lead to much hostility in the workplace. Reaffirming the need for healthy group dyanmics comes by affirming the need for cooperation, with a healthier balance of competition.
To conclude, with all the challenges against the support of this claim, the claim did not deny the need for competition, but ranked it lower. The supporting points explained that even the most compelling reasons cannot reasonably convince a society to prepare its young people by instilling competition because a sense of cooperation is far more favorable.

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Average: 7.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 298, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...own Wall Street saying that competition isnt worthwhile, they might as well be weari...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...hat this sense of cooperation can cloud ones judgements. This was said about the fam...
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Line 5, column 136, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lowers', 'lows'?
Suggestion: lowers; lows
...the need for competition, but ranked it lower. The supporting points explained that e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, while, for example, in short

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2744.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10037174721 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10844917853 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529739776952 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 848.7 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3459964674 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.727272727 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4545454545 23.4991977007 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95454545455 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18883146197 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556563490532 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040503292365 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111994448261 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276081275279 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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