The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields,is by instilling in them a since of cooperation, not competition.
The presented argument is a complicated topic. It is true that cooperation within a large business or industry is of value, but it should not negate competion. Comepetition is arguably more important than coorperation as coorperation leads to conformity, and a fear of new ideas. Additionally, it is competition that creates leaders.
While coorperation is a useful atribute in any place of work, healthy competition is what allows employees to rise to the role of leadership in a company. When an employer is looking for a new general manager, they are going to choose candidates who stand out in the normal working environment. If people are taught from a young age to solely cooperate rather than stand out, the employees will all look the same and it will be nearly impossible to find a new leader. On the other hand, it is, of course, possible that copetition may become too heavy and lead to animosity amongst co-workers. However, as long as there is no overt competition that distracts from the employees` work, I can see no problem with healthy competition. Furthermore, one`s work should speak for itself. This is to say that no one employee should be making a show of competition.
When young people grow up learning that cooperation is more valuable than competition, they may develop a fear of authority. They may not feel comfortable voicing their concerns to their employer due to their tendency towards cooperation. Of course respecting and cooperating with an employer and other employees is an important part of having a job, but without some competition, the employees will never have the chance to be leaders. Leadership is only achieved by those who are brave enough to do just a little bit more than their peers. As long as the competition is healthy and there is a respectful amount of cooperation, competition is an important part of life-especially in the workplace.
Finally, in a society of cooperation, there would be a lack of new ideas. Some examples of valuable competition from history include Edison vs. Tesla, Steve Jobs vs. Bill Gates, America vs. Russia in the Space Race, and, of course, the elections held to determine the best leader of a country. If it weren`t for these competitions to create the best form of electricity, the best technology, or to be the first on the moon, we would live in a very boring and conformed society full of people too afraid to speak out about new ways to do things or new ideas for the future.
In conclusion, while, competition for leadership in an industry or politics can get ugly, if there was only cooperation, very few, if any, people would challenge the status quo. Healthy competition is often what leads to the technology we use everyday and the lives we are able to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...those who are brave enough to do just a little bit more than their peers. As long as the c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rt of life-especially in the workplace. Finally, in a society of cooperation, th...
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ten what leads to the technology we use everyday and the lives we are able to live.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, while, as for, in conclusion, of course, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 471.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90658174098 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00100430507 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507430997877 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 728.1 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.5467524481 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2916666667 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17061560493 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0400353677317 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456149214429 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878629141114 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504645295102 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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