This topic raises a controversial issue of whether the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not by competition. Indisputably, a leader is responsible for the cooperation among the members of a team. Unless a leader believes in cooperation, team members cannot be functional enough to proceed with their task. World knows the importance of team working. Thus, I generally agree with the given statement that young people should be instilling in them a sense of cooperation to get the best out of him/her as a leader.
Firstly, leadership is meaningful when there are people to follow the leader. Leaders can make a difference when they have got people's support with them. Today, in the age of equality, every person wants their opinion to be heard. In a conference room of a meeting, everyone is allowed to speak their part and then they reach a decision together. This sense of cooperation helps the leader inculcate faith of the fellow people in him and thus making it easy for him to make a decision.
Also, cooperation among people is what helps in any kind of decision making that would affect a lot of people. No political parties or board of directors would have survived if a single person was to make all the decisions by himself. The more number of mind involves in a task, the more it becomes refined. On the other hand, a mind of competition would only want to win in the immediate situation rather than having a long term development goal. At times, competition becomes so dirty that instead of good, it harms everyone.
Although, a sense of competition is also necessary for progress. Human has a tendency to work better under a competitive situation. This enables him to work hard to win the competition, be it the government sector, industry sector or any other field. Any industry's or government's ultimate goal has always been to be number one industry and the government in power, respectively. But this reason alone cannot justify that young people should only be instilling with competition mind and not cooperation. Rather, I believe that this competitive mind should come with cooperation. Every person participating in competition should participate as a team of a particular industry or govt.
In conclusion, although a sense of competition acts as a catalyst for progress in any sector, the sense of cooperation is what keeps it going. The more people join hands for a cause, the easier the task becomes. At the end of the day, the government, industry or any other field is working on only for themselves but for all. Thus, to achieve a common goal of serving people, they should first believe in cooperation. Thus, I stand by my position that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for government, industry or any other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and competition, but as a team for the later.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, still, then, thus, as to, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 12.9106741573 256% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2485.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 514.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83463035019 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76146701107 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87764762953 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453307392996 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4457715851 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.037037037 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.037037037 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424144907675 0.243740707755 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107708972523 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17583842469 0.0758088955206 232% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248174507041 0.150359130593 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.202658232335 0.0667264976115 304% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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