The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Young generation are the future of our civilization and it is very crucial how nurture them , teach them to take on great responsibilities that lie ahead .It is essential to prepare them to be a efficient leader in their respective lives, but how we teach them to be leader .
One way is to instill in their young minds a sense of cooperation to make them better leaders and help them understand that a leader should be a person who works with people side by side to achieve great things. A leader should always have a sense collective good to efficiently manage the people he works with , if someone lacks this skill and only is concerned with his wellfare then he is bound to fail sooner or later. This realisation for the need of cooperation needs to be imbibed in them in early stages of lives. Although a sense of cooperation is essential to a leader it is not sufficient to be successful .
A sense of cooperation while teaches how to efficiently work together there are bound to be competition which they would have to face in the real world and it is essential to prepare them for it. Competition while preparing them to face real world if emphasised too strongly and unhealthy can lead to problems creating a sense of ill will for others and eventually personal greed. But if competition is taken in a healthy way it can lead to appreciation of other's efforts and also motivation to work better.
Preparing young minds for the future to be leaders it is essential to build a sense of both cooperation and healthy competition since both are essential to prepare them for the circumstances they have to face in the future .Cooperation will help them to teach how to work together to achieve something great , competition will prepare them to face failures and also work better.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1470.0 2235.4752809 66% => OK
No of words: 315.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79759243592 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 215.323595506 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434920634921 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 465.3 704.065955056 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.2926697095 60.3974514979 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.333333333 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0 23.4991977007 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 33.0 7.80617977528 423% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196197370668 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0927898826659 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457417952729 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132180854032 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264604314377 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 48.8420337079 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 100.480337079 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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