The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position , be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
I personally agree with the statement that a sense of cooperation, over competition is of more exigency in preparing young people for leadership across fields with primarily two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, one cannot ignore the demand for qualifications and certifications in a cooperative relationship. it is essential in a colaberative interaction that everyone is incharge of and be responsible of what they are specialized for. When a group of teammates work in a cooperative atmosphere, it is important to notice that impulse for individuals is strong as the results of the project is an outcome of not just one own. In addition to the sense of coownership to the final work, a supervisery and monitoring environment is more likely to be established because no one is willing risk their own work by exposing it to possible inadvertent behaviors of others. In a co-endeavor of refining and advancing of what would be the final outcome, everybody is overlooked by everyone else, and with the overall performance of the team thrives, the individuals in the team will watch more closely to others because it is now even harder for them to risk their final piece.
Moreover, it has long been believed that a leadership figure should possess the characteristics of cooperation. this is because that no one could work in an environment that only contains their own, especially for leaders of larger groups. Since it is impossible to work and achieve something big with one own's power, it is essential to learn to work with others so that one could share and obsorb the shining points of everyone else. president mao, leader of the communist party back in the 1930s to 1960s, successfully took over the govern of mainland China with a party in a much smaller population and supporters than the competing parties. However, during the primary phase of development of Chinese communist party, president mao chose to cooperate with other emulating parties even though the gap between the believes of them was inevitably large. By cooperating with other parties enabled the communist party with further widespread acknowledgement by the society, and thus offered to them a larger foundation of dominating the country afterwards.
Opponents may argue that competition is a better way to achieve perfection in specialties and thus could cultivate leaders efficiently. Although it is widely considered effective that by competing can an individual be aware of the gap and by trying to catch up with others, one refines their skills and equip themselves with leading qualifications, I maintain that the negative impact of one noticing that someone is always better than them in so many perspectives overpowers the positive. By competing with others, one is constantly saturated in a belief that someone has outdone them in a specific area, which in other words, acknowledge that they are inferior to someone. Instead of stimulating oneself to improve their skills, this negative acknoledgement may be an impulse for derelict acceptance of one's limitations.
In conclusion, I believe that in order for a society to prepare its youth to be leaders, it is better to put them into cooperations, rather than competitions because of the nature of leadership's inavoidable overlap with communication and interpersonally skills, and moreover, because of the compelling negative possibilities that will arise from competitions over cooperations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 58.6224719101 160% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2906.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 551.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27404718693 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18051228273 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504537205082 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 937.8 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5648288079 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.941176471 118.986275619 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.4117647059 23.4991977007 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151997038616 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541037861517 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476327856979 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105126101671 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557281981156 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.1392134831 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.7820224719 144% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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