The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or any other fields is by instilling in thema sense of cooperation not competition.
Healthy competition is always better but it is better to an extent. I strongly agree to the point that the best way to grow young leaders in our society is to instilling or fixing in them a sense of cooperation. Cooperation will ultimately result in well-being of our society.
Firstly, current leaders in our society are extremely competitive, they do not even have a marginal sense of cooperation. In our society venality is reaching heights. so, we or the society have to prepare such young leaders that they will be able to eschew all these problems.
In government sector, some laws are unjust to common people and there is no leader at current situation who can raise voice against it. This is the main problem in our society that no leader is audacious. For example, in county like India, traffic rules are not followed. People just ignore those rules and regulation that are actually made for their convenience and security, they are just too dumb to understand it. So, there is necessity of young minds to help improve the traffic management system of India and who will consider common people's opinion to change rules that are not harsh on people. The rules should be decided with society's willingly. Then everyone will follow those rules happily without breaking them.
The young leaders should understand that, not everything is black and white out there. There are such hazardous people in the system who will try to persuade their mind about competition. Competition should be there but I believe that healthy competition would bring out most results from them. Hence, I would like to conclude that cooperation is important that competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, hence, so, still, then, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 278.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01079136691 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60753656415 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546762589928 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 432.9 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5507960466 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.9411764706 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3529411765 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.23529411765 5.21951772744 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201679564527 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0594390839577 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466684398192 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114956661391 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252728995315 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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