"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

Leadership is a quality that instills in someone the urge to grow, in an environment that encourages cumulative growth( a group that encourages growing with peers). The motive to bolster the growth by the means of co-operation amongst each other, plays a vital role.
Co-operation is important for the essence of team work( that is the most sought after factor in today's world). A single person can not work on a huge task all alone. Team work is a factor that is encouraged to be inculcated even in a child in form of assignments and group activities. Usually, when a group is made to complete an assignment, the objective behind it is to enable that student to learn the value of team work. This helps to achieve a large task in optimized, well-divided small tasks. Also, it will help a child to realize various perspectives( as he will listen to his peers and know their views) and grow up with the bird-eye view of the subject.
On considering an example of entrepreneurs like Jack Ma, Elon Musk, etc., they are not a result of a person working alone, instead a larger sized firm which included people specialized in different fields to grow into a business. Here co-operation comes into major play. If the people who are a part of this organization do not work as a team, it will be gallimaufry. In this hodgepodge, the environment to grow and procreate will get missing.
Another example to understand co-operation can be taken of a politicians' campaign. It is usually one leader running for election, but in the backend there is a huge team co-operating and making campaigns, social media handles, etc. to place the candidate in front of the audience or citizens. Whereas, on the other hand, if the team tends to just co-operate then the growth not be exponentially positive. For example, though Jack Ma and Elon Musk are great because of the team working for them, they are competing to be the best in their specialized markets. Alibaba have competitors like local business', Amazon, other ecommerce sites. For growth here, that will enable sharing of various perspectives and innovations, it is essential to have a sense of competition.
Lets consider the case study of Coca cola and Pepsi, if both the organization will not co-operate and compete then there chances of survival decreases. In terms of marketing, if the competition increases with a thought of better advertisements then all the revenues will be streamlined to marketing rather than the Product. And, if one of the firm take a foot back from marketing, the other gets the chance to take the whole market.
Via the above case study of marketing in Coca Cola and Pepsi it is evident that for the young people to be prepared for the big game, it is necessary to teach them a balance of both co-operation and competition.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
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Message: Did you mean 'better advertisements than'?
Suggestion: better advertisements than
...competition increases with a thought of better advertisements then all the revenues will be streamlined to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, then, well, whereas, for example, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 483.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7784679089 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85707084255 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513457556936 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8916151878 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.347826087 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.34782608696 5.21951772744 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110982791111 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295604270156 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042029435715 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0652388658672 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536014135525 0.0667264976115 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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