The statement wants us to streamline the careers of college students based on their interests rather than jobs. For students(learner) interest might range from arts to science based on their choice of hobbies.Whereas, jobs will be inclined to a subject which may or may not be fascinating for him/her. To analyze the stance of statement let us see both the perspectives.
On encouraging student to pursue subjects of their interest there inclination towards the subject and the urge to learn will be high. As we know curiosity is the primary key for innovations, this will help them to innovate things in the field of their interest. Apart from innovations their curiosity to learn will help them with better knowledge on subject thus increasing better changes of employment or career growth. But, we can not be sure that amidst the learning phase, interest might be lost and, most importantly, the learning ability of the student will be in accordance with the subject taken. For example, a student might like music but it can be limited to just listening music and not being a prodigy in creating new music.
On the other hand, if subjects taken by students are based on job, the counsellors will help them to look at the opportunities that will help them further their career. In this case the career security is ensured and the student will land up with a job and exposure in the field they studied. But, the silver lining here is the lack of interest. If a child is not inclined to quality study (and even if they get a job) the task or targets allocated to them, will be done in lackadaisical method thus reducing the quality of work. This will ultimately lead to frustration and reduction in growth opportunities that was the primary purpose to encourage college students to take subject complementary to a job.
In both the cases above, decision based solely on the interest or job opportunities, can have negative impact. The another factor that can help college students to be encouraged is there purpose. If a child have purpose then even after having multiple interest the jobs can be streamlined for them based on their interests. For example, a student might be interested in reading, playing instruments but want to be a marketing head. Here, the interest of learning marketing tactics can be encouraged for a student's career and growth opportunities. Also, people who are limpid of their career can take better decisions in such circumstance rather than being forced to take subjects that are solely inclined towards jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whereas
...cience based on their choice of hobbies.Whereas, jobs will be inclined to a subject whi...
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Line 2, column 476, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... be sure that amidst the learning phase, interest might be lost and, most importa...
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Line 4, column 463, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to market'.
Suggestion: to market
...ng head. Here, the interest of learning marketing tactics can be encouraged for a student...
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Line 4, column 505, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...rketing tactics can be encouraged for a students career and growth opportunities. Also, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, so, then, thus, whereas, apart from, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9023255814 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79477995991 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458139534884 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6972767049 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.947368421 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.21951772744 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302017595432 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110174986556 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696916696104 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19610577942 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339452880647 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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