The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Many would say that a sense of cooperation is the most important quality of a leader in any field. In some fields, it is true that ability to cooperate with others is crucial. However, I firmly believe that to nurture a future industry leader, the importance of a sense of competition sometimes outweigh that of a sense of cooperation.
Admittedly, it is true that collaborative skills are deemed as a crucial value when it comes to certain fields where always include conflicts that cannot be ignored. In politics, a leader has to know how to cooperate with other to solve all conflicts, and those who are not good at it will be end up ignoring the other parties' voices and ruining democratic spirits. In addition, in education field, a teacher or a professor who doesn't know the value of cooperation cannot instruct group projects which always involve disagreement among members. In this regard, there definitely are some fields where cooperation is indispensable.
Nonetheless, it does not necessarily mean that cooperation should be always highlighted over competition. In industry, strong leadership is needed even though there are sacrifice of individual's opinion. Imagine an online marker company that strive to increase their sales in a daily basis and compete with their competitor. They need to quickly decide all strategies related to marketing, pricing, and so on, or they will lose.
In sum, I am against for the statement that the best way for society to prepare the young for leadership is instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition. While It will hold true in some field where solving conflict is important, it is not the case when powerful leadership is required.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nonetheless, so, still, while, as to, in addition, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1428.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 282.0 442.535393258 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06382978723 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93349014287 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58865248227 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9612157326 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.846153846 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69230769231 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197235863504 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626075672564 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926373590996 0.0758088955206 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123508574034 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108134201936 0.0667264976115 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.