The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The choice for a person to respond to some scenarios and situations is subject to behave based on one's belives and upbringings. The prompt suggests that the ideology that the society needs to portray should be instilled in the sense of cooperation rather than competition. Not necessarily, the sense of cooperation will help the society to boom, rather might turn it to the south of it. I strongly disagree with the recommendation input by the author due to the mentioned two reasons.
Given the fact that cooperation is a very helpful tool in this world when it comes to domains like leadership in government, it fails to be a boon and rather reflects much on being a bane. For instance, in a scenerio where political parties are fighting to be victorious, a person needs to have such a caliber so as to stand up for the people being represented and rather not lack in communicating the requirements. If considering cooperation as the best practice to prepare societies young people, the candidate might just backout and resulting in lack of support for common man needs. Thus resulting in an unfair election. This simulation will reflect poorly to the society and will eventually result in people loosing faith in the government processes.
Further, in scenerios revolving around industries, it's mandatory to be competitive rather than cooperating in life where fame and wealth are subjective to performance and hard work. It might not be useful to let others succeed always and find yourself in a pit of failures and losses. For instance, be the human population as it may, there are always a limited number of jobs and work in society to fit everyone's needs. To further this inquiry, ups, and downs in the market quite dynamic in nature. Events like these can't help an individual to succeed in life if not proven worthy. Hence bringing in competition along with a little cooperation might be beneficial for the personal and overall growth of an individual.
Of course, some argue as per the market trends and society evolves, that cooperation is the sane and most helpful ways in which we all progress, I rather question the statement, based on the above reasons if actually improves or be beneficial in the long run. If it does not, we are rather in for a positive future ahead and might be teaching the upcoming generation a life lesson never to be forgotten.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 311, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
..., a person needs to have such a caliber so as to stand up for the people being represent...
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Line 9, column 220, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'succeed'.
Suggestion: always succeed
...k. It might not be useful to let others succeed always and find yourself in a pit of failures ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 518, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...te dynamic in nature. Events like these cant help an individual to succeed in life i...
^^^^
Line 9, column 583, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...o succeed in life if not proven worthy. Hence bringing in competition along with a li...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, hence, if, may, so, still, thus, as to, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1976.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87901234568 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82314772637 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538271604938 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4503617992 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.235294118 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8235294118 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201124783832 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.059586599857 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504019008538 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12022998559 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492207114983 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.