The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Being a leader is nowadays a very appreciated position. More and more young people in a university-age want to lead their own company or be in an important position in a big firm. Therefore, our education should definitely prepare us for this task and the curriculum should be focused on it. Furthermore, I mostly agree that the most important factor when one wants to be a leader in the future is having a sense of cooperation, not competition and I will show 3 reasons for that.

To begin, cooperation plays a crucial role in leadership, therefore a society of young people should be educated in this field the most. For instance, the founder of Microsoft, Bill Gates, was a prodigy child from the very beginning, however, this was not what was the most important thing in his career path. When he was in university-age, he cooperated with his best friend and this union resulted in one of the best-known companies in the world. Without cooperating, Bill Gates would not achieve everything that he achieved, as some goal are impossible to be gained alone. Therefore, even the most brilliant people need cooperation to be a good leader and achieve some goals. That is why the best way for society to prepare young people for leadership is by learning how to cooperate.

Further, not only cooperation is the crucial thing when being a leader, the competition is a negative thing that influences leaders. It is known, that by the competition it is possible to gain more enemies which will not be eager to help in the future. For instance, the Polish government currently ruling party, PiS, is known for its competition and definitely not cooperation. The leader of the party, Jaroslaw Kaczynski, is famous for his slandering speeches towards the opposition, therefore, he has a lot of enemies in the government. That is why, when there is voting in the government, the opposition whatever what is always against the proposed changes in the law, even when the recommendations are proper. Therefore, as we can see, a sense of competition is not an advantage when being a leader as one might get some enemies which are eager to harm. That is why, young people should be focused more on cooperation, not competition.

On the other hand, one can say, that competition propitiates development as it makes leaders more willing to risk to get the advantage. However, this is cooperation that makes development in the world. For instance, in a past, the US and Russia compete with each other to be the first ones on the moon. When it comes to Mars exploration, NASA changed its attitude and decided to cooperate with Europe to gain this goal together. Therefore, cooperation is very important.

In conclusion, this is a very complex subject, and there are no easy answers to the problem of whether cooperation is more crucial in leadership, or maybe it is competition. However, based on the examples from history, it is cooperation that allowed leaders to achieve their goals, not the competition. Therefore, the governments should focus on instilling in young people a sense of cooperation rather than competition as the first one is the crucial factor to be a good leader.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 110, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risk getting'.
Suggestion: risk getting
...ent as it makes leaders more willing to risk to get the advantage. However, this is coopera...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, may, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.5258426966 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 35.0 12.9106741573 271% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 539.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89424860853 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95642853928 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 835.2 704.065955056 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2280324487 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.52 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.56 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228943823565 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719892491835 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680838660361 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134800228242 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297656650182 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 100.480337079 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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