Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It is commonly known, that nowadays schools prepare students almost only for the academic aspects of life. Children and adolescents have basically only classes from science, math or history. Therefore, a lot of children in these days have much bigger knowledge when it comes to historic events, rather than how to cook a dinner for family or repair a classic lamp. Therefore, I do agree with the claim, that schools should do more to prepare students more for non-academic aspects of adulthood.
One very important thing is that not every student goes to university; therefore, not everyone needs to have very academic knowledge. The big amount of children from primary schools, does not want to have a higher education, therefore, their education that they get, which is the primary and secondary school should give them the more broad knowledge to prepare them for the adulthood. In fact, many families in the US cannot afford sending their kids to university. That is why, children of these families would be better prepared for the adulthood, when the school classes showed them how to make practical things, as building something from a wood, sewing or cooking. This kind of classes would show these children the opportunities they have, when not taking the academic path for the future.
Additionally, school is the institution which prepares us, citizens, for the adulthood. In fact, it might have bigger imact on our future than our parents have. Therefore, the governments should focus on the education most of its attention, as it is their goal to build peaceful society where the unemployment rate is low. Imagine, that schools provide only academic education, without practical one, as a result, all children want to pursue their career in university. If all people had higher education, there would be high unemployment rate, as everyone wants to be on a high position, but there is not that much space. Therefore, it is the governments’ interest to provide education in every field, to create society with all kind of specialists and non-specialists. That is why I do agree with the claim.
On the other hand, it is understandable that the main focus of schools is to provide academic knowledge, as they want to give equal opportunity for evey child to educate themself in their future. In addition, people with high academic knowledge of math or science, as Elon Musk or Jeff Besos are the ones that change the world in which we live. However, not everyone will be Elon Musk, therefore everyone should have an equal chance to educate themself on many fields, not only academic.
In conclusion, therefore, the claim is subjective, and there are some schools which are more focused on pragmatic aspects of life, and some that are focused on academic aspects, every students in a primary or secondary school should have a broad range of possibilities to choose the field in which he/she feels the best. Therefore, I do agree with the statement that schools should do more to prepare citizens for non-academic aspects of adulthood, as for many people this is the only type of education they get, and if they will not get practical knowledge from school there is no other place they can get that.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 434, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to send'.
Suggestion: to send
..., many families in the US cannot afford sending their kids to university. That is why, ...
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Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...her hand, it is understandable that the main focus of schools is to provide academic knowl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, therefore, as for, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2684.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 539.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97959183673 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70759246623 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421150278293 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 846.0 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9295542327 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.80952381 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26832047364 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955260326947 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100758838606 0.0758088955206 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178814653106 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072617289584 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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