The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Cooperation and competition is an essential components of the society. Both ability needs for leaders: I think cooperation with individuals, and competition with groups is necessary for leaders. Cooperating with individuals with a group, the leader can control the group. Competing with other groups, leaders can solidify their own groups.
A person with leadership should have an ability to control and persuade a variety of individuals: nobody would follow him or her without appealing his or her opinion, and just pushing the opinion sometimes leads to uprising. Persuading someone requires getting other's feeling and reasoning, and make the own opinion to fit into the someone. Cooperation, rather than competition, is squarely related to this ability: cooperation usually needs to persuade someone their opinion, or to derive a conciliation.
However, the history seems to show there are strongmans, who seems never cooperate with the others, bringing great achievements. It might be true, but all examples I am aware of is not exactly fits in the counterargument: even though strongmans could not cooperate with their employee, they know how to cooperate with those who has position equivalent with them. For example, I have seen various generals when I was in compulsory military service. The stereotype of generals is to control privates by compulsory order, but generals I had seen is not: they have a strong sense of humor and they know how to persuade even privates.
I also agree that, nontheless, leaders should know to compete with other groups. This may seem to contradict with the previous opinion, but it really does not: the previous statement is about to cooperate with each individuals, and that I will talk about is to compete with various companies, not individuals. Competition between groups brings us a unification within each groups, as World Cup makes people in each country in unison.
However, it may harm cooperation between groups when it is needed: I have heard a story of CEO who suggests competition between each part of his company to leaders of each department. The competition solidifies each department, and it seems like in high productability. However, he could not conciliate each departments when it is needed, and it results in division of the whole company. Therefore, the leader should to adjust the level of competition: over-competition could split groups or harms themselves.

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Average: 5.4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'component'?
Suggestion: component
...eration and competition is an essential components of the society. Both ability needs for ...
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Line 2, column 329, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'someone'?
Suggestion: the; someone
...g, and make the own opinion to fit into the someone. Cooperation, rather than competition, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29015544041 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03177442298 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531088082902 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.77640449438 563% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3161754322 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.444444444 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0943607913407 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358008968804 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276398793516 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0551962039913 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0255977114002 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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