The following appeared on the Mozart School of Music Web site.
"The Mozart School of Music should be the first choice for parents considering enrolling their child in music lessons. First of all, the Mozart School welcomes youngsters at all ability and age levels; there is no audition to attend the school. Second, the school offers instruction in nearly all musical instruments as well a wide range of styles and genres from classical to rock. Third, the faculty includes some of the most distinguished musicians in the area. Finally, many Mozart graduates have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional musicians."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The Mozart School of Music advertises itself as it would be the best choice among other music schools. However, their advertisement presumes unproven hypotheses: First, the wide coverage of their teaching does not mean good quality. Second, there is no reason the presence of distinguished faculties implies the good quality of teaching. Third, the school's graduates' output does not mean the school teaches their students well.
Firstly, it argues it has famous and distinguished faculties. To derive the conclusion that the school is best choice, we have to assume that the ability of distinguished faculties is positively related to teaching. It is also possible, however, that famous faculties are not appear frequently so students have no chance to be taught by them, or their teaching skill is poor. Under these unwarranted situation, we could not say The Mozart School of Music is the best choice.
Secondly, the school advertises it teaches about almost all of musical instruments and a wide range of genres. However, they tell nothing about the quality of their wide coverage of teaching. It is possible, as their name might suggest, that they really covers various range of instruments and genres, but what they really concentrates on is limited, like classics. In this case, students outside of this limited genres or instruments could receive poor quality of teaching. Especially, they advertises some of their faculties are famous musicians: compare with this fact, it is also possible that there are genres whose faculties of the school is not distinguished. Although we do not have a reason to presume all distinguished musicians teaches well, mentioning both facts could belie their teaching environment.
Thirdly, the school claims that many graduates of them are well-paid and famous musicians. To deduce the conclusion from this fact, we have to demonstrate that their teaching is really related to graduates' high salary and fame. It is also simply possible that almost all of students of the schools have high financial ability, or all of their parents are musicians. In this case, the students can be provided lessons outside of the school, or chances of joining famous performances. Under this unwarranted situation, the relation between the school and graduates' outputs would be weakened.
I have examined three non-averred hypotheses in this advertisement. Unless the school shows these assumption is valid, we should carefully speculate their advertisement before to enroll our children to their school.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2076 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.203 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.726 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.774 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 104, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...o derive the conclusion that the school is best choice, we have to assume that the abil...
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Line 2, column 277, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'appeared'.
Suggestion: appeared
... however, that famous faculties are not appear frequently so students have no chance t...
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Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'advertise'
Suggestion: advertise
...r quality of teaching. Especially, they advertises some of their faculties are famous musi...
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Line 5, column 93, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'these assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; these assumptions
... advertisement. Unless the school shows these assumption is valid, we should carefully speculate...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 28.8173652695 177% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2133.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34586466165 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83181181774 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461152882206 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6658920905 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.571428571 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276701703749 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893910811493 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867777611797 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169664204979 0.128457276422 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520582300742 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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