"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The prompt says that to prepare the young people for leadership, it is needed that they should be competitive, not cooperative. I yield that competition is needed to get the best version of oneself out. But, cooperation is also needed for a prosperous society. There are a few reasons in support of the claims, which I am going to discuss in the following sections.
To begin with, competition is compulsory for a nation to reach its peak. Competition helps a person get the best version of himself out. For example, in the secons world war, the allied force scientists and central force scientists both competed with each other to produce nuclear bombs. It was due to the competition, which made one of them be successful in producing the bombs in a very short period of time. If there was no competition to produce the nuclear bombs between the allied force and the central force, it would not be possible to produce a nuclear bomb, which was a huge project to materialise, in such a short period of time. Many examles can be shown in the support of the claim that competition is imperative for a nation to reach its culmination of development.
But, even though competition is necessary to reach the peak of development, it is cooperation, which plays a vital role in the sustainable development. Without cooperation, in the macro level, the nation cannot reach its highest point. If the competitive persons do not help each other, a big project will not succeed. It can be extrapolated to the previous example. The competition existed not only between the alied force and the central force, but between the scientists among the allied force. But, it was not only competition, but it was cooperation existed among them, that ultimately made the project successful. If cooperation did not exist among the scientists of the allied force, they would get jealous of other's achievements, and might not help them succeeding further, that ultimately cost the whole project.
In my conclusion, the prompt is not a trivial one to state a solid conclusion. Both competition and cooperation have merits and demerits of their own. In my opnion, I prefer these two to be present in everyone, who wants to succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... sections. To begin with, competition is compulsory for a nation to reach its ...
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... in producing the bombs in a very short period of time. If there was no competition to produce...
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Suggestion: period
...project to materialise, in such a short period of time. Many examles can be shown in the suppo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88563829787 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88196648438 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457446808511 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 562.5 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9211039938 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.85 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19574222193 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611603201928 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412408604468 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119438673282 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066435538867 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.