The author weighs cooperation than competition and asserts that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in every field is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, however following essay will address the importance of a sense of competitiveness like cooperation for developing our society, industry, or other fields.
Admittedly, a sense of cooperation is an indispensable ability for a good leader. For example, if a leader is responsible for the decision making of the department of government, the leader should hear what people want and what experts recommend because a leader is representative of common people who elected him or her. Without cooperation with experts or denying to accept common people's ideas, he may ignore his responsibility. Let's consider a leader of a business. If he does not corroborate with his or her employees, it would be hardly successful because one person cannot check all of the things for a good product. A business consisting of members who are thinking about their promotion and do not want to listen to others’ opinions for better decision would fail to survive.
However, competitiveness is also an important character for an effective leader. In the contemporary rapid-changing world, no nations or industries can survive without harsh competitiveness. For being competent nations, a leader of government need to focus their limited resource on improving high-technologies such as AI robot or drone industry. If a leader always sets his or her priority on cooperation with other countries, it is hard to get their achievement. Since the one most important responsibility is survival of a nation, a leader who needs to progress the country should compete with other countries for securing their nation.
Furthermore, competitiveness is essential to businesses and every innovative and successful businesses have leaders who are good at cooperating with inner groups and at competing with outside of groups. For example, think about Steve Jobs who was a maverick leader of Apple corporation. He relied on not only cooperation but also competition with other cell-phone businesses including Nokia. He could lead the success of Apple with the competition with several businesses and it made Apple more rigid to other competitors. Another successful leader Mark Zuckerburg also illustrates how competitiveness is important. If he cooperates with other social networking service and does not compete with them, he might not provide the service like Facebook. In the competitive business world, a leader who was educated on the importance of cooperation might not secure survival and protect their company.
In sum, the author's claim that we need to inspire a young leader to cooperate with other people is plausible in certain circumstances, nonetheless, a sense of competitiveness is also necessary characteristics for being an effective and successful leader. Thus, to make our society more healthy and competitive, we need to take a balanced approach between cooperation and competitiveness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 359, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'denying accepting'.
Suggestion: denying accepting
...er. Without cooperation with experts or denying to accept common peoples ideas, he may ignore his...
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Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...deas, he may ignore his responsibility. Lets consider a leader of a business. If he ...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...cessful because one person cannot check all of the things for a good product. A business c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2602.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42083333333 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32586663727 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504166666667 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.982333668 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.904761905 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352164319665 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102323012068 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120746682608 0.0758088955206 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245776641638 0.150359130593 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.181332470024 0.0667264976115 272% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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