The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement proposes that it is more important for society's future leaders to have a sense of cooperation than competition. I steadfastly agree with this claim because a cooperative spirit in our leaders is critical; it encourages compassion, creative collaborations, and maximization of the others bring to the table. It is thus able to ensure the maximal societal benefit the leaders can achieve.
In academic fields, certainly, cooperation in leaders is necessary because leaders often act as teachers and pass their knowledge to their collaborators and future generations. Richard Feynman, one of the most famous physicists in recent history, is not only lauded for his contributions to the Standard Model, but also is praised for his ability to communicate with others and promote international, collaborative projects. By including others, he was able to channel and strengthen everyone's impacts, which led to great advancements in the field as a whole that could not have been possible if techniques and methods were fiercely hoarded in the spirit of competition.
However, when it comes to the industry, people may bring up Jeff Bezos to support competition over cooperation. He is not on the path to become the world's first trillionaire because of his cooperative spirit, but rather thanks to his cutthroat policies, exploitive labor regulations, and undermining of both competitors and collaborators alike. While this competitive spirit does grant him great personal success, this is not the spirit a society would like to encourage in their youth, because it does not benefit society as a whole, regardless of how much personal success it leads to. Instead, inculcating a collaborative spirit ensures that successful members of society keep working to improve society itself, in addition to furthering their own agendas. An excellent example of this is Bill Gates, who gained success from his creation of Microsoft but still looks out for public interest through his various scholarships and education initiatives.
Still, people might argue, what about our political leaders? It is impossible to become a politician without a competitive edge against your opponents. Just look at Donald Trump, he became the American president through his competitive spirit! Unfortunately, from a societal point of view, a person simply taking the leadership roll is not enough. They must actually fulfil their duties with competence and compassion in order to be effective in their positions, especially in case there is a crisis. Donald Trump's competitive nature means that he wants to give the impression of winning, regardless of where the statistics stand or what cost the victory may come at. That is what is worsening the COVID-19 crisis in the USA. In contrast, compassionate leaders, like Jacinda Arden in New Zealand, have seen much more success because their priority is cooperation, not competition. Thus, their policies aim to better society rather than only their own statistics.
Thus, whatever the field, collaboration is key aspect that needs to be promoted in our leaders. Competitive spirit may get individuals in the leadership position, but it curtails their efficiency and positive societal impact in that position in the absence of compassion. Instead, competition should come secondary to cooperation, as the statement suggests.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, then, thus, while, in addition, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2841.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44252873563 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07581293499 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565134099617 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 889.2 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6662220339 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.136363636 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7272727273 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.18181818182 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122505517647 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346424235191 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295767742043 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0738592627599 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231265834947 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.1639044944 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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