The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Young minds in today's world are facing immense competition in any domain that they wish to pursue, as a result there may be some kids who feel that the right way to go forward is to compete with every individual and push your way towards leadership and power. Others feel that for the collective good of a society, the best way to prepare young people for government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition. I agree with the latter statement since cooperation among future leaders can lead to a prospurous society and a country as a whole. The reasoning behind my position will be elaborated in the paragraphs below.

The government structure around the world works on the basic principle that includes a ruling party and an opposition party which keeps on questioning the steps taken by the ruling party. To some extent, such healthy politics is ideal, but after sometime it develops into illogical arguments which does no good to the nation. Moreover, in times of crisis, the opposition party tries to undermine every step taken by the ruling party. For example, during the covid-19 crisis in India, the opposition party was blaming the ruling party for it fallacies. Such toxic politics can eventually lead to a dire a situation in the nation. Such a situation occurs due to the people competing with each other. On the contrary, if these parties keep their competition aside, and work with a sense of cooperation, probably India can supress the covid-19 surge successfully and with lesser casualties. Hence, it is ideal in politics to work with a sense of cooperation, since it ultimately results in the best thing for the citizens of that country.

Industries are often competing with each other in order to do better than their counterparts. This sense of competition is what drives people to look for new methods and new techniques to increase their profits. Such competition leads to innovation and discoveries, which ultimately proves beneficial for the people all around the world. This means that competition is a good thing and should be promoted, but is it? The current century has seen many scientists, businessmen and inventors disappear in mysterious circumstances, and then it is revealed that they have fallen prey to the increased sense of competition among rival industries. Such a level of competition is not doing any good to the society, on the contrary, it is robbing it of bright minds. Cooperation among business leaders can help the society since the businesses can pool in their resources and work collectively towards a single goal. This helps the society, and helps the businesses earn revenue as well.

People who think that competition is necessary for the human civilization to advance are not completely wrong. Competition is required and I am not saying that competition should be eradicated completely, but if it comes in the way of helping the society as a whole. I, as an individual would always undermine competition and support cooperation. Competition and cooperation need to be balanced appropriately if we need the society to reap rewards out of the different domains present in the world, but siding completely with competition could prove to be a bane for the world.

In sum, I am still a strong supporter of the statement that for the collective good of a society, the best way to prepare young people for government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition. I feel that there is a lot of hate in this world already, and a fresh perspective of cooperation will be a boon for the human civilization and the world as a whole.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, still, then, well, for example, i feel, as a result, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 85.0 58.6224719101 145% => OK
Nominalization: 39.0 12.9106741573 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3079.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 622.0 442.535393258 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9501607717 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99398916966 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89439482925 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 215.323595506 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438906752412 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 963.9 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3172149367 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.423076923 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19230769231 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309593183149 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814291907706 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895190347003 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192626187661 0.150359130593 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696848056083 0.0667264976115 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 100.480337079 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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