The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Leadership is not an innate quality. Nobody is born a leader. It’s a skill that an individual develops based on his life experiences and lessons. There are many factors that influence the leadership in any field, but the argument in here is about the two most important factors amongst them: cooperation and competition. The prompt recommends that the best way for a society to prepare its future generation for a smart leadership, in any field that they venture on, is by instilling a sense of cooperation in them not competition. In my opinion, I mostly agree with this suggestion and argue that a fine balance needs to be struck between the cooperation and competition amongst the youth to be a successful leader in this modern society. I present three reasons to support my opinion.
To begin with, leadership is about leading people by compassion and empathy. In other words, it’s about helping people believe in themselves and to make them feel confident and important. Thus, a fierce competition amongst the youth, which involves the adage ‘survival of the fittest’, will kill the main purpose of leadership. For example, Donald Trump, president of the United States is hated upon by many for his bad leadership. He lacks empathy towards other human beings from around the world and is highly parochial. His inconsideration towards public opinion and cries of the lesser privileged has gained him animosity from the populace. This example, illustrates the importance of cooperation amongst the peers to be a good leader.
Furthermore, any task when done together in an efficient manner takes up less time when compared to doing it individually. Thus, the skill of cooperation can lead to better quality products and services. For example, Mark Zuckerberg, who revolutionized the way people connect, couldn’t have implemented his big idea all by himself. With the help of his friends and colleagues, he was able to achieve much more than what he had planned. This shows that greater heights can be achieved through cooperation.
However, risk taking and being challenged is also one of the important qualities of a leader and competition makes an individual feel challenged. For example, research says the new products in the last 5 years is double than the number of new products in the previous 5 years. This is because of the rising competition in the marketplace. When humans feel challenged, it’s in our instincts to work harder and be the best version of ourselves. Hence, a little bit of competition can bring out the best version of a person.
Finally, in this modern day society, a good leader is expected to inspire and lead by example. He or she needs to have much more than skill of cooperation or competition. The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in this expanding world, is by striking the right balance between instilling in them a sense of cooperation and competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient manner" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...the best version of ourselves. Hence, a little bit of competition can bring out the best v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, still, thus, for example, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2459.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 489.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02862985685 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91319255088 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519427402863 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.471831226 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0740740741 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1111111111 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7037037037 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257647249074 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607688817777 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910818108006 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148428277561 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777413669988 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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