The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation and not competition.
A cooperative society is always a strong society, this can be seen in many cases present in our world today. While competition brings out the best in us individually, it is cooperative mindset among individuals that leads to epitome of success. The prompt suggests that for young people to be great leaders in any endeavor, the society needs to instill in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition. I strongly agree with this stance for two reasons.
Firstly, we live in a diverse world and currently, nations are taking global diversity seriously. Unlike before, where countries were driven by their local economy, these days the strength of a nation is in its international relations; foriegn reserve, imports, exports and much more. The leadership of such a nation has to have a cooperative mindset for such to occur and this can only be done by influencing the younger generation who will be leaders later to be cooperative rather than competitive. For example, the fortune 500 companies such as Apple made headway through a cooperative mindset. As one might say Steve Jobs was the brain behind their success, it is evident today that the cause of their success has been teamwork which still causes the company to strive even in the absence of Steve Jobs.
Further, as a popular saying, 'two heads are better than one', the best ideas usually come from a consensus of people rather than an individual, as while an individual can be inspired, a second perspective from someone else makes alot of difference. Leadership, which is not a trivial position requires people with such willingness to acknowledge opinions from others while still maintaining his stance on areas he believes will benefit everyone. For example, before the advent of democracy, most society's were ruled by Monarchs who passed their leadership From Father to Son, and although such leadership is still present today like in the case of Great Britain, it has been either adjusted or changed completely. For example, America after gaining it's Independence, and in the advent of Abraham Lincoln practiced democracy which involves a cooperative mindset and these has led to radical changes that still affect positively the world we live today, such as the abolishment of slave trade, the end of Civil war and many more.
Finally, one can argue that competition brings out the best in us, and for us to give in our maximum effort in any field we find ourselves, there has to be someone else who we can see as an adversary so as to be better than when compared. Nevertheless, doesn't the aforementioned still limit us, take for example, in a class of 50, an exceptional student who wants to be the best gets first place, and does consecutively, it is very much likely that the same student won't give in his prime persformance in subsequent
In conclusion, it can be difficult to decide which behaviour can bring out the best in us, either a cooperative mindset or a competitive mindset, notwhistanding, a cooperative society as seen in time past will always trump a competitive society which most times leads to an unhealthy environment
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to even
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...one else who we can see as an adversary so as to be better than when compared. Neverthel...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...etter than when compared. Nevertheless, doesnt the aforementioned still limit us, take...
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... in his prime persformance in subsequent In conclusion, it can be difficult to de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, so, still, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2600.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96183206107 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84776821601 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519083969466 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 121.56578466 60.3974514979 201% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.333333333 118.986275619 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.9333333333 23.4991977007 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.21951772744 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24804384485 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864996953713 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684352206836 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146380799089 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656312284441 0.0667264976115 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.1392134831 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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