Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline students cannot be motivated by school or college alone Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position yo | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Learning overtime has become an indispensable part of our lives. As we learn everyday, either as a child-- in learning our native language and basic things like riding a bycicle. Learning is a fundamental part of us. The prompt suggests Learning is mainly derived from self discipline and students cannot be persuaded by the school or college alone. I strongly agree with this stance for two reasons.

Firstly, performance in class setting, both in tests and exams are basically influenced by the student himself, with the notion that a prove of a student's learning is in his performance during written tests, thus, the college or school alone cannot push the student towards such excellence, as the student will sit for the exams. Take for example, in many Colleges in the U.S, there is an increasing number of high performance students from the black community in such schools. However, this doesn't mean that a segregated approach was taken by the school as everyone is thought equally and has access to the same facicities. Yet, the performance from blacks supersedes that of the native race despite being the minor group. Consequently, this proves the place of personal discipline, as the general level of hardwork is higher in blacks due to their backgrounds and what they personally want to achieve.

Secondly, learning is not something trivial, it is an important stage in our lives where we decide who we want to be in future and how the course we study will take us there. A student lacking such future plans or vacillating with the choice of who he wants to be will find it hard to be tenacious on how he will get there. Regardless of the influence schools might have, which is evident in giving scholarships to particular fields to challenge the student in taking the opportunity and putting his effort in it. Such efforts have mostly proven futile. For example, recently established Universities built in the 21st century have a habit of giving out scholarships within the first 5 years of inaugration, while this has proven effective as students from poor backgrounds are given the opportunity to actualize their dreams and gain an education in which their progenitors might not have had. Despite this, one can observe that such benevolence hasn't always translated to the success of the student, as their has been numerous cases of dropouts or a recant of the scholarship awarded.

Finally, one will argue that the place of or college is pivotal in ensuing positive mindset among students, such as in counselling, where suicidal thoughts are being restrained and a believe mindset being impacted on students, such efforts have no doubt improved the learning experience and created and avenue for the students to actualize their dreams. However, this hasn't always translated to the eradication of suicidal thoughts, or drop outs that have become a norm in school.

In conclusion, a personal decision to learn will always trump any form of motivation gotten elsewhere, while our experiences and those around us shape our goals, the drive must first be concieved in the individual before appropriate learning takes place.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 520.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7504813995 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 801.9 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 94.2400130274 60.3974514979 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.210526316 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3684210526 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 5.21951772744 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209461610219 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635590796981 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475644106384 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119199914482 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367614060427 0.0667264976115 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments