Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline students cannot be motivated by school or college alone Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position yo | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline; students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The prompt claims that the motivation for learning primarily depends on the individual's determination and that schools and colleges cannot by themselves be held responsible to motivate a student to learn. I mostly agree with the above argument for two main reasons, which I will elucidate below. However, I do believe that the schools and colleges can elicit the student's will to learn.

To begin, learning in any field largely depends on the person's determination, persistence and interest. The above qualities are those which initiates and fuels the learning. Albert Einstein who considered to be the one of the most intellectual person from the previous century was told by his teacher that he would would never amount to anything. Even many institutions refuted to admit him and finally he had to flew out of Germany as many people had dejected his views. However, it was Albert Einstein's determination to learning which paved his way to success. Similarly, every now and then we hear about a person who is not from a well to do family and cleared the civil service exams. It is the individual's will and interest that have brought them success.

Secondly, schools and colleges are only the medium which can guide the students to be determined and persistent, but it is the responsibility of the students to use these qualities well. Even the best and elite schools cannot make a student smart if the student is not invested to learn. These educational institutions provides equal motivations and opportunities to all the students, however, not all of the students put in equal efforts to learn. This shows that the individual's discipline plays an important role in the matter of learning.

Lastly, I do concede that sometimes these educational institutions can invoke the student's interest in learning if the provide the provide the right motivations. For example, once there was a teacher who used magnifying glass to demonstrate a student that the focus beam of sunlight can burn a paper. This student Ragunath Mashelkar who latter on became the one of the most reknowned Indian scientist had dedicated the above incident as a life changing event. Many a times the teacher's method of teaching can invoke a feeling of interest withing the students. Thus, sometimes schools and colleges can play the import aspect in the matter of learning.

In conclusion, the matter of learning largely depends on the individual determincation, however, sometimes schools and colleges can also play a part in it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Suggestion: a time; times
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Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08716707022 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86543713393 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489104116223 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1074161765 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.05 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.65 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255919915194 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800969725651 0.0831039109588 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687480920268 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160183550482 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0946214540158 0.0667264976115 142% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments