The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
We grow by sharing. Leadership is effective only when it takes everyone forward and not just one individual. In other words, a good leader is one who can do collective good. With ever changing scenarios and raising awareness among humanity, we need to be careful who we chose as our leaders and how we prepare our leaders. The claim recommends that the instilling sense of cooperation instead of competition is the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in various fields such as government, industry and more. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the claim for three reasons.
First of all, for an effective leadership, cooperation means understanding the needs as well as accomodating every person in the plan for growth. It is only by cooperation that one can bring about a sense of upliftment in both self and fellow collegues. For example , Mahatma Gandhi, father of India and a leader who brought together entire India to fight back the British regime. He achieved this with cooperation and support from the Indian citizens, by instilling in them sense of courage and the drive to achieve the independence they deserve. Leaders from the entire nation came together to work together towards a single goal. This example portrays how cooperation achieves goal meant for a group, whereas competition would just destroy the entire purpose and lead to a failed consequence. This is important to know as we understand what results cooperation can provide and thus use it to motivate young people to move in a direction where they think about collective good and not individual benefit.
Further, another important factor in leadership is to lead by helping and not stepping on people. For instance, in industry and cooperations where people help each other develop skills to work towards the common goal of taking the company forward succeed better than the ones who do not do the same. There is a concept of mentor-mentee in a growing number of organisations now, where the idea is to help people overcome their problems because only then will there be healthy minds to achieve the desired goals. If the employees are competitive among themselves and do not help each other then perhaps the company will not achieve the heights it could have had people been helping each other. Thus when new people join, they should be encouraged to share their skills among other members and learn what others know. .
Lastly, even though we move much farther with cooperation and not competition, some amount of healthy competition is vital for growth among people, industries and more. It provides a platform for innovation and challenges leaders to think creatively for achieving the set goals. However, just being surrounded with only unhealthy competition just leads to degraded results.
In conclusion, promoting cooperation among young people will result in upliftment of the society in return. It promotes development of society as a whole and increase share of knowledge among people thus in my opinion it is viable to make young people help and be considerate about people around them rather than be wary and compeitive.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, so, still, then, thus, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2630.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 521.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04798464491 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72969580245 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502879078695 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 814.5 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0482860734 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.347826087 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.652173913 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47826086957 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391143961725 0.243740707755 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103338335148 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127477463817 0.0758088955206 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209211273608 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704998040545 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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