The following recommendation was made by the president and the administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of co-education, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government ted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed co-education. Keeping the college all females will improve morale among the students and convince alumnae to keep supporting college financially.
The recommendation made by the president and the administrative staff of Grove College to the college's governing committee states the college should preserve its tradtions of all female education as this will improve the morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially. This recommendation is based on the results of surveys from students and alumnae, even though majority of faculty members voted in favour of coeducation as it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. This argument is based on flawed assumptions and does not hold a very solid ground. Three questions need to be answered to evaluate the recommendation.
First of all, how many students and alumnae took the survey? The recommendation states that 80% of students and half of the alumnae who took the survey were against co-education. However, the recommendation at no point mentions how many of the students and alumnae took the survey. It is possible that a relatebly small fraction took the survey and thus the survey does not represent the accurate result regarding what most of the actual students and alumnae think about introducing co-education in Grove college. Therefore, knowing the total number of people who participated in the survey is important to know whether the percentage who responded against co-education is relevant or not for consideration.
Secondly, will introducing co-education mean that alumnae will stop or reduce funding the college financially? The recommendation unfoundedly assumes that to keep alumnae's financial support, in place, it must remain an all-female education college. However, it is possible that the alumnae continues to support the college financially even if the the college introduces co-education. Moreover, considering the argument of the faculty memebers that introducing co-education will encourage more students to apply, it is possible that eventually the alumnae base increases a lot more and so does the funding for the college. Therefore, it is important to get proper numbers regarding alumnae decision about funding the college if coeducation is introduced. If it does not stop funding then claims in the recommendation are unfounded.
Third and lastly, can co-education increase healthy competition among students and further improve morale? The recommendation assumes that keeping the college all-female will improve the morale among the students. However, it is possible that by introducing co-education in the college, there is increased competition among the students and new methods of learning are introduced which motivate the students further to perform better. If that is the case the assumption regarding improving morale of existing students by keeping the college all female does not hold much water. Thus more research is recquired in this aspect.
In conclusion, the recommendation and the argument as it stands is not cogent. It is based on various unfounded assumptions that do not hold a solid ground. The arguments needs to provide answers for the above questions in form of detailed survey or research study to evaluate whether introducing co-education and changing the long existing all-female education tradtion in Grove College be beneficial for the college.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2714 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.417 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.039 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 219 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 185 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 125 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 81 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.783 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.603 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.133 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 188, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rvey were against co-education. However, the recommendation at no point mentions ...
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Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'introduce'
Suggestion: introduce
...t for consideration. Secondly, will introducing co-education mean that alumnae will sto...
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Line 5, column 344, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...support the college financially even if the the college introduces co-education. Moreov...
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Line 5, column 344, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...support the college financially even if the the college introduces co-education. Moreov...
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Line 5, column 755, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e college if coeducation is introduced. If it does not stop funding then claims in...
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Line 7, column 436, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the students further to perform better. If that is the case the assumption regardi...
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Line 7, column 579, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ge all female does not hold much water. Thus more research is recquired in this aspe...
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Line 9, column 172, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'need'.
Suggestion: need
... not hold a solid ground. The arguments needs to provide answers for the above questi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thus, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 16.3942115768 195% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2767.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 501.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52295409182 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09954912079 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.425149700599 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 870.3 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.6152010282 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.304347826 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7826086957 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262795108732 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845529282952 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110658586768 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173163290864 0.128457276422 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989941672114 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 98.500998004 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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