A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal rec

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

The study concludes that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. The study has based this conclusion on the facts observed, that kids in Himalayan Mountain region in Nepal despite little to no profession dental care, as opposed to kids to in suburban ares in the United States, have lower level of tooth decay. The proposed explanation is unfounded and doesn't hold a solid ground for three reasons that could possibly be true.

First of all, the conclusion from the facts presented in the arguments states that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. This brings us to question whether any facts in the arguments state that the kids in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal do not practice regular dental care. The arguments doesn't state that. So, it is possible that the kids in Nepal practice regular dental health care such as brushing twice daily and using floss every time after eating food to take care of their teeth unlike kids in suburban areas of United States. Thus it is possible that the kids in the United States, do not brush daily and visit the dentist frequently when they suffer from diseases such as cavity from lack of regular dental healthcare. This could be an explanation for why the kids in Nepal have lower level of tooth decay as compared to kids in United States.

Second probable explanation for why Nepali kids have lower levels of tooth decay could be the type and quantity of food and beverage consumed by them compared to kids in United States. It is possible that kids in United states have an increased consumption, when compared to Nepali kids, of sugar and carbonated drinks such as cold-drink and soda or to food items such as chocolates which result in higher level of tooth decay. It is possible that as kids in Himalayan mountain region live in such a remote area there is little or no availability of such food and beverage products which doesn't excessively harm their teeth in the first place. This explanation could explain why even with little to no availability of professional dental care, Nepali kids tend to have better teeth.

Thirdly, considering the immense difference in the living location of the two kids, there is possibility that the kids living in the Himalayan region of Nepal have access to more unadulterated and natural food as compared to kids living in the suburbs of the United States. It is possible Nepali kids have higher level of calcium in their diet due to various products for example pure milk available to them unlike adulterated milk with low calcium level available to kids in the United States. This explanation accounts for the facts presented in the arguments and explains possibly why the kids in United States are worse off in terms of tooth decay level as compared to kids in Nepal.

Thus, in conclusion, the proposed explanation presented in the argument cannot be fully trusted. It is possible that alternate explanations stand to reason as to why the kids in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay as compared to kids in the suburban areas of the United States. From the facts presented in the argument there are three more explanations that can possible and thus need to be reviewed in form of another another study to be be properly evaluated.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, third, thirdly, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 55.5748502994 164% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2751.0 2260.96107784 122% => OK
No of words: 569.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83479789104 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48253464151 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.347978910369 0.468620217663 74% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 873.0 705.55239521 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.1485634697 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.789473684 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9473684211 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285651278942 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11879190033 0.0743258471296 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106195463976 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208845623717 0.128457276422 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03886074978 0.0628817314937 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 572 350
No. of Characters: 2703 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.89 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.726 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.457 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.105 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.964 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.432 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.216 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5