The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all females will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The recommendation made by the president and administrative staff of Grove college is that for keeping the morale among the students at college it is alright not to matriculate male students in the college and remain female centered college as it is from century. Also, they come to this conclusion because they believe that the financial supporting is mostly from the alumnae of the college, and they voted in opposing the coeducation. However, before the recommendation can be properly promulgated, three question must be answered.
First of all, they assume that enrolling male student to the college won’t improve morale among students. They might be pretty sure that the boys lack morale and enrolling them to the college will worsen the rooted female student’s morale. Do all male lack morale? Or Does female don’t lack morale? There might be some college who only enroll male students. Do such college lack morale? There is no guarantee that female will not lack morale or male will lack morale among students. Also, Enrolling male to the college may enhance it among the students. If all of these cases are true, the argument of the author doesn’t make any sense in the recommendation.
Secondly, the college administration staffs, and president might believe that the college financial condition is at supported level mainly due to alumnae of the college and since they voted against non-enrollment of male students to the college and opposed coeducation, going against them will result in decrease in revenue. How can they be pretty sure that if they go against alumnae, they will stop supporting the college finance? They may support the college more as college have to output more empowerments who can assist alumnae. Also, the alumnae may directly involve in the college activities for prospering it in coeducation after the college remains same even after the matriculation of male students. If either of these cases is true, then conclusion drawn upon the stated recommendation is significantly weakened.
Lastly, the college staffs and president want to favor 80% of the students who voted against not making the college coeducation. What if other 20% students experienced that having coeducation cannot decrease the morale among students rather it increases student morale? They might be true that going coeducated will assist them in studying much better. Also, they may research that having coeducation can enhance college’s financial condition rather than impeding it. These scenarios also suggests that, if these are true than the staffs and presidents’ recommendation so not hold the water.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to the reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If college administrative staffs and president is able to answer the three questions above and provide more tangible evidence in supporting the conclusion, then it will be possible for evaluating the viability of the recommendation proposed above not to enroll male students to Grove College.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2499 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.142 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.789 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 190 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.329 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.358 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 467, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ance? They may support the college more as college have to output more empowerment...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2568.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 483.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31677018634 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88375995571 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424430641822 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 812.7 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2150474223 57.8364921388 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280382642271 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933425506215 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862311848414 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186802490521 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539710248351 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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