The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The article from the business magazine suggests that lesser the executive is needing the sleep, higher the productivity. In response, the author of the article comes to this conclusion based on the fact study among 300 male and female mentain advertising executives. The study shows that the executive who needs less than 6 hours of sleep are more productive than those who require more hours of sleep. However, before these results can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
First of all, is there any suggestion that the time of executives’ others than time for sleep are being utilized in work in order to be a productive? In other words, what if the productive executives are giving the same effort as as executives who need more than 6 hours. Perhaps the executive who is not productive is giving an effort to the firm only in the time of office and executives who are giving more time for firm's work even after office time. Also, executives needing more sleep are even better than those who need less sleep if they are giving time to work even after office time. If both of these scenarios are true, then the position in the argument do not hold the water.
Secondly, is there single task for single executive in the office? or in clear, don’t in the firm all the executives are reliant on each other’s work? if such case is true then the success of one executive is possible only by the support of other. The other person might be one who requires more hours of sleep and successful person may be the one who is needing 6 hours of sleep on average. Also, If this case be true than there is a false outcome of the report suggesting that executives needing less hours of sleep are the productive one. In such a condition, the conclusion of the argument above might be weakened.
Lastly, what if executives who state needing of 6 hours of sleep are lying in the study and the executives who requires more hours of sleep are true? the executives who stated that they require only 6 hours of sleep may be one with more productivity and the executive requiring more hours of sleep are less. Also, the executives (Whoever they are: either requiring less hours of sleep or requiring more) all are lying. if such scenario is true, then in such circumstances the position of the argument is flawed.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its excessive reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer three questions above and offer more obvious evidence (perhaps in the form of systematic research study), then it will be possible to fully evaluate the proposed suggestion of hiring only people who needs less than 6 hours of sleep per night.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 480 350
No. of Characters: 2198 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.681 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.579 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.451 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.884 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...zine suggests that lesser the executive is needing the sleep, higher the productivity. In ...
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Line 2, column 137, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...e being utilized in work in order to be a productive? In other words, what if the productive...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: as
...e executives are giving the same effort as as executives who need more than 6 hours. ...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 68, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Or
...ask for single executive in the office? or in clear, don’t in the firm all the exe...
^^
Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...tives are reliant on each other’s work? if such case is true then the success of o...
^^
Line 4, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tives are reliant on each other’s work? if such case is true then the success of o...
^^
Line 4, column 353, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...nd successful person may be the one who is needing 6 hours of sleep on average. Also, If t...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 499, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...port suggesting that executives needing less hours of sleep are the productive one. In suc...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 499, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...port suggesting that executives needing less hours of sleep are the productive one. ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 151, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... requires more hours of sleep are true? the executives who stated that they require...
^^^
Line 6, column 365, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
...ives Whoever they are: either requiring less hours of sleep or requiring more all are lyin...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 365, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ives Whoever they are: either requiring less hours of sleep or requiring more all ar...
^^^^
Line 6, column 418, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... sleep or requiring more all are lying. if such scenario is true, then in such cir...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2260.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71816283925 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53437797625 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.396659707724 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.767681882 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.619047619 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8095238095 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210652080598 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766243105672 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064873167461 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139434969063 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672099638014 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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