Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

The recommendation asserts that government should invest as much as in arts as they do in the military. This is a complex issue with disparate opinions. In my opinion, I believe that governments if not equal amount then atleast close to the amount invested in military should also invest in the arts. I believe this will have consequential results for the betterment of country for three reasons.

First of all, investing in the arts means investing in the people of the country. Investing in the arts will result in direct upliftment of the skilled labour working in craft and different forms of arts. To illustrate this viewpoint, in India, there are lot of people who work with jute and create various products out of jute but their sales have considerably declined in the current market. Not just jute workers, but there are hundereds of other 'artists' in India, who are unable to provide their products in the correct market at correct price and are thus declining. The art of handiwork on clothes, pottery, madhubani art are just few examples which are declining in the market because of lack of support and increased competition from other entrants in the market who provide cheaper products made in factories. This example brings an important point to notice where the government can help in upliftment of these workers. By investing and promoting the work of these artists and by providing them a platform, for example exhibitions, to sell their work.

Secondly, investing in arts directly translates into investing in the culture and traditions of the country. Art is a reflection of creativity of people, culture and traditions of the country. If the governments invests only in the military and not as much in the arts then what about the daily lives of the normal citizens of the country. As much, it is important to invest in military to keep the people safe it is important to invest in the arts for the betterment of life of the people. Art is what brings colour in one's life and governments should do what it can to promote that in it's country. This will further result in increased Gross Domestic Product (GDP) for the country as 'artists' begin to contribute more and the government can further export it's art to other countries.

Lastly, as much as it is important to invest both in arts and the military, it can be difficult to say whether the government should invest the equal amount in both. It depends entirely on each nation and the need of the hour of the country. Some military equipments are expensive and considering a country needs a strong defence in place for crisis, it should not hesitate in investing that. If in such times the government decides to not invest in military rather in arts would not be a wise decision, as the safety of the citizens comes first.

In conclusion, the recommendation is a complex issue which depends from time to time and country to country. However, a government should not entirely ignore the arts and spend all the money in investments in the military. It should think about upliftment of both and should invest in arts a fair amount, if not equal to military, as it will have returns.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2615.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 546.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78937728938 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83390555256 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67383523547 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.404761904762 0.4932671777 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 809.1 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.506188275 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.958333333 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.491335475402 0.243740707755 202% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154128469772 0.0831039109588 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149340090514 0.0758088955206 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312626106625 0.150359130593 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110781603382 0.0667264976115 166% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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