The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Shaping the Young Minds of the country in a right way today leads to a very good result in future as a famous saying goes by 'Today's Youth is Tomorrow's Future'. The prompt claims that the right way to mould young people of a community is to incoporate a sense of harmony rather than competition in them. I partially agree to this claim and would like to present 2 examples of the same.
Indeed cooperation is an eminent requirement among leaders of any industry but ignoring competition is not a great idea though. Competition also plays a key role in shaping an individual's future. A healthy competition between people will often result in a productive outcome. For Instance, let us consider an example of the gaint market leaders Apple and Samsung. Both are on par with eachother in launching more and more innovative products. Their product line has no bounds. Both compete each other and release models in the market that are of cutting edge. If there was no competiton between them, we would not have seen such innovation lately. We would have ought to satisfy ourseleves with the old, monotonous products they had. This very competion between them had led to such a huge invention of new technology.
Secondly, an example of nokia can also be taken. Nokia was once a market leader with no mere competition to it. There was no looking back for the makers of Nokia Phones. However, things have changed drastically within a very short period. Since there was no competion for this company, they haven't bothered on the innovation part which eventually led to the downfall of the company when Samsung, Apple have released their smart phones. The emergence of smartphones has crippled Nokia making it lose all its customer base. So, by this we can see how much important a role competion plays in the industry.
We can see that cooperation also to a very wide extent in shaping one's future. Cooperation between companies has been seen largely in almost all the industries. The same example of Apple and Samsung can be considered. Although there exists a hige competition between them, there also exists coorperation. Samsung purchases its chips from the company Apple. Without with friendly alliance between them, Samsung would not have emerged as a global leader now.
So, to conclude, we can say that both cooperation and competition play vital roles in shaping the future leaders. The absence of even one of them would result in bad or rather undesired consequenes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90238095238 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63188520416 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6648207044 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 73.5357142857 118.986275619 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.28571428571 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174503906826 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431038117742 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426691185409 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968744364168 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025844992937 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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