"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Today's world is a very competitive world.Everyone is filled with a sense of competition among his milieu.So the claim of author that "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for a leadership in government , industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation , not competition" is a very debatable topic.On one hand where it is true that a person needs to be coorperative with his colleagues, but on the other hand it is imperative that he needs to be competitive at the same time.The reasons for my position will be explained in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, the contemporaray society is a very competitive society.Every person is thriving to survive in this society,be it by any means , by hook or by crook.Due to this reason, people who are too trusting and credulous get cheated by others. So one has to be competitive in this society and should keep his benifits on his priority.For example, in a company , when a person reaches one of the top positions in the company , then he is supposed to be fully dedicated towards the company as he's aware of the inner workings of the company.He has to be compeitive in nature to get his company to make the best of profits and make new deals.Suppose he leaks out some confidential details to some other person, that may result into benifit of other company.So one has to be competitive in the modern society.
On the other hand , it is true that every person should have a sense of cooperation also.In today's world , every person is supposed to work with a team at some or other stage in his life.If the person is not cooperative, then he would be seen as a pariah by his colleagues.Especially , when in leadership position , a person has to be cooperative and flexible enough to understand various needs of his team mates and the problems faced by them.He just cannot remain in his own bubble.He has to work with every member of the team and thrive for excellence in a collective notion as not only his, but his team's progress will be counted. Also in fields like politics, while making a policy or taking any decision , you ought to consider views of everyone and understand what people want.Cooperation is the key to success in such fields.
Also ,human beings lives in societies.They interact with tons of people in their daily life.Every person has a different point of view and different thoughts.So sometimes,this leads to arguments between the people.So it is upon us to be cooperative and try to understand other person's viewpoint.We've to stay collectively in this society and make it better.
Hence,to conclude,the basic requisite in today's world,according to me,is to have a sense of cooperation along with being competitive to survive in the society.Having a sense of cooperation helps a human being in becoming a better member of society while being competitive ensures his survival in the world and pushes him to be the best.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, still, then, while, as to, for example, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 58.6224719101 159% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 503.0 442.535393258 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85487077535 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15618320524 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461232604374 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 794.7 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 23.0359550562 308% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 163.788938352 60.3974514979 271% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 348.857142857 118.986275619 293% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.8571428571 23.4991977007 306% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.2857142857 5.21951772744 331% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 43.0 7.80617977528 551% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189939001687 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0989408160117 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741840243258 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119168722925 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801238167356 0.0667264976115 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.3 14.1392134831 264% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -0.59 48.8420337079 -1% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.0 12.1743820225 255% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.03 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.42 8.38706741573 124% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 11.8971910112 504% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 11.2143820225 271% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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